Should minors who commit serious crimes receive the same punishments as adults? Hello, everyone! I wrote down the essay as below. The essay title comes from Eiken 1st grade test, which is very famous English proficiency test in Japan. Could you give me advice to brush up my writing skills ? (ex. correct spelling, grammatical error, usage of words etc.) ----------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Notes * Write an essay on the given TOPIC covering three of the POINTS below. * Structure : Three or more paragraphs, including an introduction and conlusion. * Length : Around 200 words TOPIC Should minors who commit serious crimes receive the same punishments as adults? POINTS ・Financial costs ( I chose ) ・Mental maturity ・Public safety ・Justice ・Prison life ( I chose ) ・Schooling ( I chose ) ----------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- 　I think minors who commit serious crimes should not receive the same punishments as adults. I have three reasons to support my idea. 　Firstly, viewing from the point of finacial cost, we cannot expand prison anymore. I hear that some local government has faced the quandary that they cannot maintain the facilities because of lack of budget. What is worse, the number of prisoners is getting higher year by year. Also, we have to consider building prisons only for children because they are still young. 　Secondly, even though we built prisons for children, from the point of prison life, it is not good condition for children. I often hear that there are bullies in prison and this is very tough for mentally immature children. 　Thirdly, after children prisoners came back from the prison, I think they cannot go back to the usual schooling. They cannot enjoy school life as other kids. Nowadays, young children use social network services like Twitter and Facebook. There is a dangerous possibility that children prisoners suffer from net bullying. 　As you can see, once children got the same punishments as adults, they cannot go back to normal life as other kids. Therefore, I think they should not receive the same punishments as adults. 208 words

" 哪 " 的讀音 < nǎ > or < něi > 您們好! 我是日本人。 我開始學中文了, 可是我有提問。 ・ 他是哪國人? 哪個正確 < nǎ >還是< něi >? 謝謝! P.S. If possibele, English or Japanese answers would highly appreciated.