Please, Please, Please. Which one is the most correct one?

please, My question is about which of the words in capital letters are most correct, the first or the second phrase? can be both of them correct?

1. We had several reasons for not accepting his application. IN ANY CASE, he was unable to produce the required documents. This is correct.
1. We had several reasons for not accepting his application. TO START WITH, he was unable to produce the required documents. This is also correct, but ONLY if you follow it up with another reason why the application was not accepted.

2. There is a total RESTRICTION on smoking in public places in Los Angeles This makes sense
2. There is a total BAN on smoking in public places in Los Angeles This makes MORE sense

3. They all thought very GREATLY of my old colleague
3. They all thought very HIGHLY of my old colleague This is correct

4. You cannot have an increase in salary. It’s NOT QUESTIONABLE
4. You cannot have an increase in salary. It’s OUT OF QUESTION This is correct, but it sounds better to say "You cannot have a pay raise. It's out of the question.

5. They put iron bars on the windows to PREVENT burglars to break in. This would make sense if it were worded like this: "They put iron bars on the windows to prevent burglars from breaking in."
5. They put iron bars on the windows to MAKE IT IMPOSSIBLE for burglars to break in. This is correct.

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7. I suggested THAT WE ALLOW the children GO to the cinema and see Troy "I suggested that we allow the children to go to the cinema to see Troy"
7. I suggested OUR ALLOWING the children TO GO to the cinema and see Troy. This makes sense, but doesn't sound very natural.

9. The job doesn't appeal to me very much. ON THE CONTRARY, the money they pay is ok.
9. The job doesn't appeal to me very much. MIND YOU, the money they pay is ok This is correct

10. Our cab was delayed by the traffic WHAT MADE US TO miss our train. This does not make sense.
10. Our cab was delayed by the traffic WHICH MADE US TO miss our train "Our cab was delayed by the traffic, which made us miss our train"

I want to improve my English.

I have been learning studying English for a long time, But it does not work isn't working. My English is still very poor. Sometime Sometimes, I doubt wether whether or not I have the talent for it. I thought I should stop learning and that it was a waste of time. However, I like English and wish I can could communicate fluently with English. I am looking forward to finding a native English native speaker to help me practice it.

5 sentences in English ( part 2)

6) That girl is not sensible so she rarely use her uses good judgment to make disitions decisions. (the word is judgment)
7) The sky is clouded cloudy so I think it will be raining rain. (the word is cloud as verb) You needed "cloudy" here because you were using it as an adjective (describing the sky). To use it as a verb you could say "The building was on fire! Smoke clouded the room" or "Don't let your anger cloud your judgement."
8) I have some insect stings after our trip. I think I need to go th to the doctor. ( the word is sting)
9) My dog run ran away and nobody know knows where is he he is. I don't know how will I live I will survive after this loss. ( tge the word is loss)
10) The monster crashed into the buiding building and ate some people (the phase word is crash into)

Day 1

Hi, how a I need to improve my English, so I will try to write something here every day. I hope you will help me by correcting my writing, and if you are learning Spanish and I can help you whit with anything please let me know.

Well, yesterday I felt sick. I had headache and a little of low fever, so I went to the doctor and him he gave me same medicines some medicine. I already feel better today, but still I had a little of fever early in the morning. I hope tomorrow I will be completely fine  back to normal, because I want to return to train work, and I can't do it if I am feeling not good don't feel well.

train I'm not sure what you're trying to say in this sentence. Train means like "work out" or "a vehicle on the railroad". Maybe you mean that you want to return to "work"? 

completely fine  This makes sense and is correct English, but it doesn't SOUND natural. We would say either "I hope I'll be back to normal tomorrow" or "I hope I'll feel 100% tomorrow" or "I hope I will feel better tomorrow"

Five sentences in English

I'm reading a book and when I find a word I don't know I criate create a sentence. Please correct my mistakes
1) These group dance classes are only for youth, we don't accept children and adult people who elder than 25 years old. ( the word is youth)  These group dance classes are only for youth. We don't accept children or adults older than 25. That is how you would write it, but it doesn't SOUND natural for an English speaker. Youth is better used in a sentence like "The youth of today are obsessed with their cell phones!" or "I am old and out of shape, but in my youth I could run very fast!"
2) Such ridiculous situation! The best students didn't do their homework. (the word is ridiculous) What a ridiculous situation. The best students didn't even do their homework!
3)I like this film, but the plotline is not like in the book.(the word is plotline)
4) I'm grateful that you came to help me out in this difficult situation ( the word is grateful)
5) She is utterly lost when her parents arrgue argue. (the word is utterly)

Thank you!

Great job! I hope you're enjoying your book!