Your composition is excellent and amazing~~

You use an adequate range of vocabulary(当地餐馆、酒吧女侍、服务员、奖赏、出色地、培训计划、尊敬、重视) and organize information logically. Keep studying~~~

You only learn Chinese for 2 months and you have already wrote a composition! You are pretty smart and clever~~=v=

But there are some tiny mistakes having made.

You need to use 进步很大(correct) or 有很大进步(correct) instead of 很进步(incorrect).Because 进步 is usually used as a verb or a noun. In China, we don't put an adverb such as 很， in front of a verb or a noun. Therefore, you can say 进步很大 to express that you have made great progress.

Hope the suggestion is helpful and you can enjoy a gorgeous holiday in Taiwan next month. (*^__^*) 

我为什么学宿（普）通话？

I will give you some better translation. It's more natural and precise. But the original translation you wrote is ok, I can understand with your writing with no interference. ^-^

在中国，有不同的方法吃蔬菜，常常生的或者油炸的。比较，在英国，吃蔬菜的方法一点点更保守。

A better sentence is: 在中国，吃蔬菜的方式很多，可以生吃或者油炸。而在英国，吃蔬菜的方法则更保守一点点。

I suppose that you translate directly from the English expression:there are different ways to eat vegetable, by fresh taste or deep-fry？

As Chinese native speakers, we usually say:"吃蔬菜的方式很多，可以生吃或者油炸。"

And if you want to compare A to B, you can say: "而在英国" instead of "比较，在英国",it is more natural speaking~~just like,"But in England...."

"一点点" is adverbial, and Chinese people put the adverbial behind the adjective. So I recommend you use "更保守一点点".

hope these propose can be useful.^3^