Making Suggestion 2nd

Dear Madam ,
My name is Giulio. I’m a master’s degree Management Engineering major.
As nearly most all of the students do, I usually have lunch at college cafeteria. I really enjoy the meals that you serve to us, above all when you cook Italian food on Friday.
On behalf of my class and myself, I would like to argue talk with you about the overcrowding problem, but before of that I would like to emphasize the purpose of this email. It is not just a critique, but we are interested in solving this problem all together.
We think this situation affects both the economics and safety of the college in both economic and safety sphere. As For the economic aspect, several student prefer having lunch out of the college and in this way much revenues are is lost. About security For the safety aspect, we noticed that especially by the 1.10 pm there are too many people in that room, it could be a great problem in case of an emergercy.
As I mentioned early earlier, we want to give our contribute contribution. Here’s some suggestions that came up during our arguments discussions:
1) Exploit the external part area nearby the cafeteria, especially over the summer season
2) Increase the number of service points for to reduce the income length of the queue
3) Misalign Stagger the time exit time among of the classes

We hope you are going to take into account these considerations.
Sincerely

Thank you all for your corrections

I hope that you get the change you are looking for! Well done, this was well written. A few notes:

1) 'Argue' is often a negative word. Exceptions can be in academia and politics. In this kind of situation, it is politer to use an alternative such as 'talk' or 'discuss'. 

2) 'Stagger' is used when talking about spreading something out over time - scaglionare (penso!)

3) 'Would' needs to be followed by 'like to' when you are talking about something you want (http://www.skuola.net/grammatica-inglese/uso-want-will.html)

I hope that is helpful, let me know if you have any questions! Well done again.

jane eyre3

1. Jane’s childhood at Gateshead. The orphan Jane lives with her aunt, Mrs. Reed, and her cousins at Gateshead, surrounded by the hate of her relatives.(This is not incorrect, but I think 'surrounded by relatives who hate her' would sound better.) After a fight with one of her cousins, Mrs. Reed sends her to the “red-room”, the chamber in which her uncle Reed died, as punishment and she faints because of the fear of her uncle's ghost. (This is quite a long sentence. I would divide it after punishment: '...as punishment. She faints...') Mrs. Reed decides to send her away to school.
At the end of this stage Jane cuts her ties to her fake family telling her aunt “I will never call you aunt again as long as I live” (Chapter 4). She asserts her freedom and her authority over her tyrannical aunt, and betrays an extraordinary sense of justice and a need for love.
2. The period at the Lowood School. Life at the charity school is harsh. However, Jane befriends with a student named Helen Burns who, after a while, dies of consumption because of the bad conditions of the school. The overseer of the school is replaced and conditions improve. Jane excels in her studies for the next six years. After spending two more years at Lowood as a teacher, Jane decides to accept a position as governess at a manor called Thornfield.
She survives thanks to her firm in spirit nature (I would suggest: 'firm-natured spirit') and her strength. Excelling at school and finding a good job, she releases herself. (I'm not sure what you mean by 'releases' here. 'Free' has a similar meaning, and could be used here in a phrase like: 'she frees herself from Mrs Reed'. 'Realises' looks and sounds similar, and could be used here in the phrase 'she realises her potential'. Both are true.)

This is really good! It's better than some book reports I've read written by native English speakers :). Let me know if you have any questions!

Wednesday

Good morning everyone

I woke up early this morning because I had to go to Milano for an important work.

I just arrived in Milano and I am going to have a breakfast in a bar.

My meeting will be at 10.30 and I feel a little bit nervous .

I hope the meeting will end early and in the best condition. (Better alternatives: 'with a good result', 'with a good outcome', 'in the best way possible').

I will back home for dinner unless there is traffic. 

thanks for any corrections

Well done! I hope I have helped. Let me know if you have any questions. Keep it up!

NURSING ASSISTANCE - correct me

WHAT DO YOU DO WHEN U RECEiVE A NEW PATIENT IN THE WARD?

I introduce myself by talking with the patient in a calm manner and with empathy. Then I ask to the patient his name, date of birth , his document if he is taking some drugs, if he has allergies, dietary needs and his medical history, writing all in the patient's medical chart.
Then I check his vital signs (like blood pressure, oxygen saturation), his care plan if he has got one.
At least I give to him his wrist band and I show to him his room, his bed, the toilet, the bottom button with which he can call the nurses and I make sure that he is comfortable.

WHAT MAKES A GOOD HOSPITAL WARD?

Well.. a good hospital ward has to guarantee the safety for patients and staff. So it must be clean, in order to reduce risk of infections, orderly to permit faster assistance and reduce risk of a falls and well-lit.
There has to be a good communication between staff members, this permits more informations about the patients, so better assistance!
Again it is important to have support between coworkers in order to reduce conflicts, it follows lower stress and minor probability to make error during assistance  this leads to less stress and a lower probability of making mistakes while assisting patients.

Notes:
When you are talking about a person of either sex, it it common to use they/their instead of his or her. If you want to specify the gender of the patient, then use he/his or she/her. 

Remember to use a capital 'I' when talking about yourself! I would also revise the use of has vs have.

Let me know if you have any questions. Well done and keep it up!