Please, someone could correct these 5 questions ?!!!

Please, someone could correct these 5 questions ?!!!

1 - Who is busiest in your family?
I guess that I'm the busiest in my family, because I work in two different jobs.

2- Do you have enough time to do what you want ? Why or Why not?
No, I don't, because I would like to have a healthy life. but Unfortunately, I have no time to do exercise and eat healthy food.

3- How do you spend your free time ?
I spend my free time playing games such as Super Mario and Donkey Kong on Nintendo WiiU.

4- If your boss asked you to work overtime, would you agree?
I would agree, because I have no problem with working overtime sometimes.

5- Do you usually come home late or early?
I come home late some days of weekdays, because after I work I go to college.

I appreciate the attention
Thanks

My room

I have a room. My room is composed of many things. There is a piano, desk, bed, fan, chair, bookshelf, and closet etc. My room is not wide, but I can use easily when I am alone. I can practice dancing, and I can do my homework too. I can use my phone, so it is possible to have a chat with my friends. I want a  little more bigger room than now because I am growing up.

My favorite singer

My favorite singers are a part of a boy band. They are very famous and popular singers.They are called  BTS. They are very handsome. They have a good voices. I want to see my favorite group, BTS. I love BTS!

Tip: Remember to add a space after a period when you start a new sentence.

[English Practice] Athlet's foot #1

I have had athlete's foot for more than 20 years.

Of course, I had tried to cure it, but I failed every time.

I had taken pills for athlete's foot for 6 months.
It worked really well. At that time, I thought I got a new clean foot!!

But, it didn't last long...
About a year later, I had athlete's foot again.

I tried same thing (the pills for athlete's foot), but it did not work.
The doctor said, "These pills are works only one time for each people."

After that, I tried oriental therapy.
It's a little complicated, but it's very effective.
I got a new foot again, but it lasted only a year.

Of course, I tried this oriental therapy again, but it's not as helpful as before.

Finally I gave up to cure my athlete's foot.
I let my feet have fun with that germs...
But, it didn't last long because I have a serious problem.

-to be continued...

Earthquake

30 minutes ago, in Korea the earthquake is occured. It was from Ulsan and some area which are far from Ulsan can feel it too.While I can't feel it because I was learning Chinese but my friends feel. I want to feel when land is shaking because in Korea earthquake is not occured well. Anyway it is nice to people don't hurt.

Thirty minutes ago, an earthquake in Korea occurred. It was from Ulsan, and some areas which are far from Ulsan could feel it too. I didn't feel it because I was learning Chinese, but my friends felt it. I want to feel when the ground is shaking because in Korea, earthquakes are not good. Anyways, it is nice that people didn't get hurt.

My goal.

I wanna improve my english skills.
I want to be polyglot who speaks in 4 language, english, japenese, chinese. and korean that is my mother toung.
I will practice english first. !!

I want to improve my English skills.

I want to be a polyglot who speaks four languages: English, Japanese, Chinese, and Korean (my mother's native tongue).

I will practice English first!

Tips:

-Do not use slang when writing (eg: wanna)

-Remember to capitalize proper nouns (eg: countries) 

-Learn the different uses of punctuation other than the comma (eg: colon, semicolon, parenthesis)  

-Only use one punctuation mark at the end of a sentence

Picnic

Tommorow I will go to the Daegu with my classmates.Because we have to learn about dream and future job.I want to be a flight attendant. But tommorow I learn about camera and k-pop stars.I excite it.

Tomorrow I will go to Daegu with my classmates because we have to learn about dreams and future jobs. I want to be a flight attendant. However, tomorrow I will learn about cameras and k-pop stars. I am excited. 

Tips: 

-Check your spelling

-Subordinating conjunctions shouldn't start sentences

-When expressing emotions, use "am/ is/ are" before the emotion