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1. Today some people think that <font style="background-color: rgb(255, 255, 0); box-sizing: border-box; color: rgb(51, 51, 51); font-family: Roboto,"PingFang SC","Open Sans","Helvetica Neue",Helvetica,Arial,sans-serif; font-size: 13px; font-style: normal; font-variant: normal; font-weight: 400; letter-spacing: normal; orphans: 2; text-align: left; text-decoration: none; text-indent: 0px; text-transform: none; -webkit-text-stroke-width: 0px; white-space: normal; word-spacing: 0px;">an</font> educated person plays <font style="background-color: rgb(255, 255, 0);">a</font><font style="background-color: inherit;"> </font>more important role in<font style="background-color: rgb(255, 255, 0);"> the</font> global market than<font style="background-color: rgb(255, 255, 0);"> a</font> person with rich experience.
2. In<font style="background-color: rgb(255, 255, 0);"> the</font> contemporary world there are a lot of people who have <font style="background-color: rgb(255, 255, 0);">a</font> high education diploma from <font style="background-color: rgb(255, 255, 0);">the</font> top universities.
3. Most of them have a job with<font style="background-color: rgb(255, 255, 0);"> an</font> average salary and higher.
4. However there are a lot of examples <strike>when</strike> <font style="background-color: rgb(255, 255, 0);">where</font> educated people can't find a job according <font style="background-color: rgb(255, 255, 0);">to</font> their specialization and work in <strike>another</strike> <font style="background-color: rgb(255, 255, 0);">other</font> <strike>work</strike> places with low<font style="background-color: rgb(255, 255, 0);">er</font> salar<font style="background-color: rgb(255, 255, 0);">ies</font> and sometimes as a illegal workers.
5.<strike> From</strike> <font style="background-color: rgb(255, 255, 0);">O</font><font style="background-color: rgb(255, 255, 0);">n</font> the other hand there are a lot of cases when people without <font style="background-color: rgb(255, 255, 0);">a</font> diploma become <strike>a</strike> successful professionals and leaders of huge companies.6. Some of them became a billionaires and have buil<font style="background-color: inherit;">t </font><font style="background-color: rgb(255, 255, 0);">an</font> incredible carrier.
7. But if <font style="background-color: rgb(255, 255, 0);">we were to </font><strike>compere</strike> <font style="background-color: rgb(255, 255, 0);">compare</font><font style="background-color: inherit;"> </font><strike>this</strike> <font style="background-color: rgb(255, 255, 0);">these</font> two categories of people, the number of educated people is bigger than <strike>talanted </strike><font style="background-color: rgb(255, 255, 0);">talented</font> people.
8. So, I agree with <font style="background-color: rgb(255, 255, 0);">the</font><font style="background-color: inherit;"> </font>thought that people with diploma<font style="background-color: rgb(255, 255, 0);">s</font> play<strike>s</strike> <font style="background-color: rgb(255, 255, 0);">a</font><font style="background-color: inherit;"> </font>significant role in <font style="background-color: rgb(255, 255, 0);">the</font><font style="background-color: inherit;"> </font>global market <strike>than</strike> <font style="background-color: rgb(255, 255, 0);">compared to</font><font style="background-color: inherit;"> </font>people with experience and their contribution to world development is more valuable.
0 votedMarch 17, 20190Online supermarket
<strike>I use online supermarket often,</strike> <font style="background-color: yellow;">I shop online often</font><font style="background-color: inherit;"> (we know what you are referring to when you saying shopping online. It doesn't sound natural to say I use the online supermarket) </font>because <font style="background-color: inherit;"><strike>I'm living</strike></font><font style="background-color: inherit;"> </font><font style="background-color: rgb(255, 255, 0);">I live</font> (If you saying I'm living in Singapore it gives off the meaning that you are currently living there but don't permanently. On the other hand, if you said you live in Singapore, it sounds more like you are a permanent resident. I'm guessing you are from Singapore so saying I live would make more sense to the listener. I don't think this is a technical error because people would still understand what you mean but it just sounds more natural) in Singapore and it is too hot to go to the supermarket here. <strike>So</strike> A lot of housewives in this country are using it<strike>. Bu</strike>t <font style="background-color: rgb(255, 255, 0);">but</font> (You could have two separate sentences here but its easier to understand if it's one) it is still <font style="background-color: rgb(255, 255, 0);">in its</font> transition period now for the online supermarket companies. They sometimes miss the customer's orders <strike>and delay to deliver.</strike><font style="background-color: rgb(255, 255, 0);"> or the deliveries get delayed</font><font style="background-color: inherit;"> (I changed "and" to "or" because even though both are likely to happen, they are more likely to happen independently, someone's order might get missed while another persons delivery gets delayed. When you use the word "and" you are implying that both happen to the same person at the same time)</font><font style="background-color: rgb(255, 255, 0);"></font><font style="background-color: inherit;"></font>side note: depending on if you are speaking or writing, using contractions such as changing it is to it's make the words sound more natural but since this isn't an grammatical issue, I didn't change them. just something to note!
I could also write this in my own words if you would like!
Good luck with your English studies!!!
0 votedMarch 15, 20191
