<em>Akari-sensei,</em>

<em>Just a few little corrections... it is good to see someone thinking of the plight of the Greek people right now.</em>

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<em>Take care,</em>

<em>Jas</em>

"Greek Bailout Found" crowd founding

I'm very excited to hear about this crowd founding.

<em>There are two verbs, "hear" and "hear about". Use "hear" when you can hear something directly... "It makes me angry to hear the dog barking"... Use "hear about" when you hear about a topic indirectly: "It makes me angry to hear about people complaining about barking dogs". </em>

"Greek Bailout Fund"
https://www.indiegogo.com/projects/greek-bailout-fund#/story

I especially like the founder's idea.

"All this dithering over Greece is getting boring. European ministers flexing their muscles and posturing over whether they can help the Greek people of not. Why don't we the people just sort it instead?

The European Union is home to 503 million people, if we all just chip in a few Euro then we can get Greece sorted and hopefully get them back on track soon. Easy."

"€1.6bn is what the Greeks need. It might seem like a lot but it's only just over €3 from each European. That's about the same as half a pint in London. Or everyone in the EU just having a Feta and Olive salad for lunch."

That's so true.
I chipped into this crowd founding.

<em>"to chip in(to)" is a common colloquial phrase and is what should be used here... I think you know this and just forgot  :-)</em>

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That's because

1. I've been to Greece, and I got had a great experience. I have important friends who are important to me in Greece too.

<em>In English you never really "get" an experience... "had" should be used instead, with "a". </em>

<em></em>"Important friends" is a special phrase in English... it specifically means important people, senior managers in a company, politicians, for example. You may have those sorts of friends in Greece, Akari-sensei, but I think you mean friends who are close to you personally. Apologies if I am wrong :-)

I want Greece to recover.

2. It sounds like a joke at first, but if
this crowd founding success succeeds, and if it can helps one nation by the power of power of crowd of people on the internet, how amazing it is!

<em>I would write this as "how amazing it would be if the power of the people on the Internet could help a nation!". Your word order is very Japanese, in English we would nornally start with the assertion at the beginning "How amazing..." starts the sentence. In English you "say how I feel THEN say what/why/when I feel etc.", in Japanese it is often the opposite. Think of English speakers as being more direct... that mindset will help with English grammar in sentences like this.</em>

I'm excited about this campaign, I really like his idea.
I'm wishing it'll success succeed!

<em>"excited" goes with "about" in a similar way to "hear" above. </em>

<em>You are using the noun for "success" when you probably meant to use the verb, "to succeed".</em>

<em>Kumiko,</em>

<em>This was fascinating! My wiife does not use make-up at all so I have never known how complicated this is. :-)</em>

<em>I just needed to correct your list punctuation: start at "1.", capital letter for each item and ".",  at the end. This is how I corrected it.</em>

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<em>It is also possible to write a list without the capital letter and end each item with a ","or a ";". You may want to ask your tutor which one is best as I am not sure.</em>

<em>Also, when you use an object to DO something TO something you do not use 'by", you use "with":</em>

<em>"I dig my yard WITH a spade".</em>

<em>"I changed the TV channel WITH the remote".</em>

<em>Regards,</em>

<em>Jas</em>

How to do makeup in English(w/Japanese)

I had a fun lesson with Alexis (http://www.italki.com/teacher/1507612) about makeup in English.
We showed our cosmetic items in front of the screen to each other ;-)

How I do my makeup every morning; :

1. Wash my face and apply lotion and milky lotion. （顔を洗い、化粧水と乳液をつける）

2. Apply face cream. （化粧下地をつける／塗る）

3. Apply/put concealer over my freckles. （コンシーラーでシミを隠す／シミの上にコンシーラーを塗る）

4. Apply foundation with a sponge / sponge foundation. （スポンジでファンデーションを塗る）

5. Curl my eyelashes carefully by with an eyelash curler. （ビューラーでまつげを丁寧にカールする）

6. Apply three colors of eyeshadow over my eyelids. （まぶたに３色のアイシャドーを塗る）

7. Apply eyeliner. （アイライナーを引く）

8. Apply mascara twice to thicken my eyelashes. （まつげが濃くなるように、マスカラを２回塗る）

9. Use an eyebrow pencil to reshape my eyebrows. （アイブロウペンシルで、眉毛の形を整える）

10. Apply blush on my cheeks. （チークを塗る）


That's all. It takes about 20-30 minutes every morning.

<em>Cage,</em>

<em> </em>

<em>Just a few things to help you out with here. When you use "want" or "want to be able" you just need to add the infinitve of the things you "want to be able to do". I corrected your post to do that.</em>

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<em>Be careful of articles, "the" and "a" and plurals. I know that Japanese does not have these so it can be tough but keep working at it.</em>

<em>"Others' opinion" is written better as the opinions of others. Both are plural as there are "many" others and many "opinions".</em>

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<em>I underlined some phrases that are understandable in English but could be improved:</em>

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<em>"My English isn't good enough yet and my goal, to get proper, natural speaking skill is still far."</em>

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<em>could be written better as:</em>

<em> </em>

<em>"I have a long way to go before I can speak English in a natural way" OR:</em>

<em>"I have a long way to go before I can speak English fluently" OR</em>

<em>"I have yet to achieve my goal of speaking English naturally".</em>

<em> </em>

<em>Each of these have slightly different meanings, depending on your actual goal with English. You do not need to state that "My English isn't good enough yet" as that is implied by the second half of the phrase... what your goal is. When describing goals  "a long way off" or "I have yet to achieve" are good phrases to use.</em>

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<em>"I'm happy if you could help me, and on the other hand I'm very interested in teaching my mother tongue."</em>

<em>could be better written as:</em>

<em>"I would be happy if you could help me. I could also help you with Japanese, my native language".</em>

<em>"I would be happy" is the better form of the verb. "Also" should be used here as you mean "as well" or "in addition to". Use "on the other hand" for alternatives:</em>

<em>"We can go shopping. On the other hand we could go to the movies".</em>

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<em>Regards,</em>

<em>Jas </em>

Please Correct My Sentences and Make Them More Natural. (sorry, reentry)

My English isn't good enough yet and my goal, to get proper, natural speaking skill is still far. I want to become be able to discuss on a wide range of topics, to understanding others' opinion the opinions of others and expression to express mine correctly. I'm happy if you could help me, and on the other hand I'm very interested in teaching my mother tongue.

<em>Mami,</em>

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<em>Your response was written well, just a few words missed out.</em>

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<em>"Now" is better than these days.</em>

<em> </em>

<em>"Don't know" works here but I have given "cannot find" as an alternative... which is used is the choice of the writer. </em>

<em>Answer is sngular as you will receive only one response to your mail(hopefully ;-)).</em>

<em>Best of luck,</em>

<em>Jas</em>

Respond to a Written Request: TOEIC Writing test

I wrote my answer here for the mock test. I'd like you to correct my English.

Directions: (outline) Read the e-mail below and respond to it as if you are a customer. Describe ONE problem that you have had with the printer and make ONE request for information.

From: GF Products Customer Service
TO: New customer
SUBJECT: Thank you

Thank you fro your recent purchase of a GF3000 home Printer. We hope you enjoy our product. If you have any problems with the printer, please contact us via the Internet at (URL).

<My answer>
Dear GF Products Customer Service: ,
Thank you very much for your e-mail. I enjoyed the printer for a week, (problem →）but sometimes it doesn't work these days now. I read the manual to solve the problem and checked my computer to see if it had a problem but I still don't know cannot find the reason. (request→） I'd be glad if you would give me a call to help so that I can find out how to solve fix this easily.
I hope to receive an answer from you soon. Thank you.
Regards,
(My full name)

Thank you.