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Akari-sensei,
Just a few little corrections... it is good to see someone thinking of the plight of the Greek people right now.
Take care,
Jas
"Greek Bailout Found" crowd founding
I'm very excited to hear about this crowd founding.
There are two verbs, "hear" and "hear about". Use "hear" when you can hear something directly... "It makes me angry to hear the dog barking"... Use "hear about" when you hear about a topic indirectly: "It makes me angry to hear about people complaining about barking dogs".
"Greek Bailout Fund"
https://www.indiegogo.com/projects/greek-bailout-fund#/story
I especially like the founder's idea.
"All this dithering over Greece is getting boring. European ministers flexing their muscles and posturing over whether they can help the Greek people of not. Why don't we the people just sort it instead?
The European Union is home to 503 million people, if we all just chip in a few Euro then we can get Greece sorted and hopefully get them back on track soon. Easy."
"€1.6bn is what the Greeks need. It might seem like a lot but it's only just over €3 from each European. That's about the same as half a pint in London. Or everyone in the EU just having a Feta and Olive salad for lunch."
That's so true.
I chipped into this crowd founding.
"to chip in(to)" is a common colloquial phrase and is what should be used here... I think you know this and just forgot :-)
That's because
1. I've been to Greece, and I got had a great experience. I have important friends who are important to me in Greece too.
In English you never really "get" an experience... "had" should be used instead, with "a".
"Important friends" is a special phrase in English... it specifically means important people, senior managers in a company, politicians, for example. You may have those sorts of friends in Greece, Akari-sensei, but I think you mean friends who are close to you personally. Apologies if I am wrong :-)
I want Greece to recover.
2. It sounds like a joke at first, but if
this crowd founding success succeeds, and if it can helps one nation by the power of power of crowd of people on the internet, how amazing it is!
I would write this as "how amazing it would be if the power of the people on the Internet could help a nation!". Your word order is very Japanese, in English we would nornally start with the assertion at the beginning "How amazing..." starts the sentence. In English you "say how I feel THEN say what/why/when I feel etc.", in Japanese it is often the opposite. Think of English speakers as being more direct... that mindset will help with English grammar in sentences like this.
I'm excited about this campaign, I really like his idea.
I'm wishing it'll success succeed!
"excited" goes with "about" in a similar way to "hear" above.
You are using the noun for "success" when you probably meant to use the verb, "to succeed".
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