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L'émission que j'adore
Je suis une spectatrice de d'une émission de la province de Zhejiang province. C'est une émission qui présente les gastronomies de tout le monde. Je suis attirée par cette émission, elle parce que j'aime bien manger. Donc De plus, elle aussi présente aussi les paysages locaux local, ils sont très jolis jolie. J'aimerais voir et mangerais les ces spécialités quand j'ai j'aurais le temps.
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L'émission que j'adore
Je suis une spectatrice d'une émission de la province de Zhejiang. C'est une émission qui présente les gastronomies de tout le monde. Je suis attirée par cette émission, parce que j'aime bien manger. De plus, elle présente aussi les paysages locaux, ils sont très jolis. J'aimerais voir et manger ces spécialités quand j'aurais le temps.0 votedMarch 29, 20151- 私と日本語（２０１５年のオタワ地区日本語弁論大会の開催） 「私の日本語弁論大会のスピーチ」 よろしくおねがいします。 高校生の時、友だちが日本のアニメをしょうかいしてくれました。 私は、欧米のアニメとはちがう、日本のアニメの物語や キャラクターのしゅるりのおうさに かんどうして、 日本のアニメにきょうみをもちました。 日本のアニメをもっと楽しむために、 じまくなしで アニメを見たいと おもったことが きかけで。 私は、日本語を学ぶ ことにしました。 高校を そつぎょうするころ には、日本のドラマやバラエティーばんぐみ を見ていました。 ドラマやバラエティーばんぐみは、 じっさいの日本の人や人々の せいかつについて たくさんの ことをおしえてくれました。 とくに、日本のバラエティーばんぐみは、 日本人が まじめで えんりょうぶかい 人たち だと おもうと、 イタズラやゲームの ないようが ユニークで おもしろいと おもいました。 私は日本語を学ぶ ことは、 日本の文化にちかづくための、一番のほうほうだと おもっています。 私は いつも、言葉をただしく 知ることが できたからです。 私は生花や茶道、日本料理やえんげきなど、 日本の伝統的な文化にも きょうみが あります。 日本の文化の すばらしい ところは、 たんじゅんな そざいから せんさいなものを つくるところです。 日本について、もっともきょうみぶかいことは、 店頭文化都県第文化の ちょうわです。 時間がたって、どんどん国はかわりました。 しかし、店頭的な祭りやしきたり、そして、 文化は今でも日本人の 生活の なかで いきつづけています。 こんごのもくひょうは、日本に行って英語をおしえることです。 そして、英語をおしえることで、私も日本の人に おかえしを したいとおもっています。 私のさいしょうのステップは日本語能力試験に ごかくすることです。 私は今自分のもくひょうに ちかづくために、 いしょうけんめい勉強しています。 ありがとうございます。 「私は初級にしゅつじょうしました。私は三等賞を得ました。」March 29, 201560
Hi:) I'm Natsumi.
Finally I have time to write!
I've been busy this week.
I'm Natsumi, I live in Japan and I'm 28 years old.
I'm studying English, but I haven't improved my English skill very much.
I want to talk in English so I can improve my English skill.
I like reading books (I especially like Scandinavian mystery), visiting many cafes, sleeping, listening to music and playing the drums (but I have no time).
Oh I like to watching FRIENDS. I watch it everyday!
I might I can't reply soon in weekdays but nice to meet you :)注釈：
なつみさんの英語の文法はいいです。これはなつみさんへ私の注釈です。
(Sorry, my Japanese is at the beginner level)1. 'I have time to write' and 'I can finally write' are both OK to use.
2. Because you are talking about you (Natsumi), use a comma (,) and <em>I</em> to combine the sentences.
3. Different verb tense and added very
4. Ask yourself: Why do you want to talk in English? (なぜなつみさんは英語をお話していますか？)
So you can improve your English
5. When you have a comma (,) or a period (.), a space is always needed before the next word/sentence.
(This works for parentheses too, they need a space before the first one - () or [] )
6. "I can't always reply on the weekdays, but it's nice to meet you! :)" makes a bit more sense as a sentence.
スティーグ・ラーソンの本が好きですか。If you have questions about the corrections... おしえてください！You can message me anytime!
0 votedMarch 29, 20150A dining train.
I went to northern Kyoto by dining train.
My friend from high school invited me on this trip.
He and I like to take trains, so we often went on trips.
The dining train was so gorgeous! I took a lot of pictures.
I ate lunch plates in this train. It was very delicious, I especially loved the raw crabs.
I enjoyed this trip, but... my friend said that "I am engaged. So, I won't be able to take these trips with you after this. This is my last one".
I felt so sad. I should have blessed him, but I couldn't do it.
I was stupid. 。・°°・(＞_＜)・°°・。Note: 'after this' can be also 'anymore'
if you need any help to figure out the corrections, let me know!
0 votedMarch 29, 20150The first time I'm writing a note
My teacher showed me this website.
I'm not good at speaking English, but I want to travel abroad.
So, please correct my sentences on notebook.
Thank you!
NOTES:
1. Because this is a title, many ways are OK
2. Usually, someone shows something to you
3. Verb was missing; 'not good in English' is also OK
4. Correct
5. Because it's an application, 'on' is OK, 'in' is usually with actual object
If you need any help, I am here to help! I have Skype and kakaotalk. If you need to practice, please send me a message!
0 votedMarch 29, 20150I got a new lunch box, so I cooked a rolled omelet.
By mistake, I added too much sugar and the omelet became too sweet.
NOTES:
1. "cooked" is acceptable, "made" (to make) can be used too.
2. some a were missing
3. This can be used at the beginning or ending, you can also use 'because I added too [...]', see ***
4. Combine the sentences. (Think like in Japanese: [...] から、[...]。)
5. 'became' is acceptable, using 'was' is better.
*** Alternative sentence: Because I added too much sugar, the omelet became too sweet.
0 votedMarch 29, 20150Korean BBQ
I went to eat yakiniku with my colleagues from the office.
Yakiniku is a type of barbecue originally from Korea.
Oh, my topics are almost all about eating.
I live to eat! Hahaha ( ^ω^ )NOTES:
1. Pronounced "barbecue" but I'm sure you know that.
2. "colleagues from the [...]" is better to use.3. changed the whole sentence, makes more sense to say it's a type of [...] from [...]
4. It's better to use the full word "barbecue", especially if you will use it as a verb. (to barbecue)
5. changed the sentence, see no. 3
6. sentence was missing something to make sense
0 votedMarch 28, 20150CORRECTIONS:
Orange marmalade
Ok! Let's start! First day of practice on italki! Will I find somebody to correct these words?I want to speak about making jam. This weekend, I'm going to make an orange marmalade that can be eaten at breakfast or in the afternoon! It doesn't seem to be very easy. I want to put the orange zest inside it. Oranges are biological, they come from the beautiful region of Sicily. They are very juicy and smell really good.
Two days ago, I put them in cold water after having made many holes in the orange peel. I have to change the water two times a day: in the morning and in the evening. However, yesterday I forgot to do it!
Tomorrow I'm going to cut them and cook them until they become a good marmalade with a light bitter taste! At least, I hope so! Thanks for your help!
1. Marmalade is the correct spelling. Marmelade is a town in Haiti (Caribbean)
2. "To correct" is better, but "Will I find somebody to help me in correcting these words?" is acceptable.
3. "that can" is better because it gives options, but implies it's not limited to that.
4. Explains what Sicily is, especially if the person you talk to, doesn't know where it is.
5. Closed the sentences to create only one.
6. On fruit and vegetables, the word for 'skin' is peel. It's also a verb: 'to peel'
7. Because it's an action, it's better to use 'to do'
8. On the fire = to cook. Cook them.
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