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Password
Nowadays, personal privacy is seen as a big issue that everyone attends to protect. Therefore, people get accustomed to set a password in order to save the papers, secrets or pictures which is not allowed be known by their owners. People not only feel comfortable after setting the password but also can't help but rely on password to put plentiful secretly stuff into "the box" which is supposed to be very safe. However, there are some problems gradually happened owing to this sense of security. In other words, setting the password make people put themselves into another dangerous situation but without consciousness. There are some cases to improve the problems brought after setting the password. Recently, lots of sexual pictures of celebrities were be hacked by computer hacker because these victims had once trusted this cloud computing service and setting the password undoubtedly . Some people hack any facebook account and Internet scams. To sum up, even password still is quite important, making sure yourself to be cautious every time.
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Nowadays, personal privacy is seen as a big issue that everyone intends to protect. Therefore, people are accustomed to setting a password in order to save their papers, secrets, and pictures which are not allowed to be seen except by their owners. People not only feel comfortable after setting a password, but also can't help but rely on a password to put plentiful secret stuff into "the box" which is supposed to be very safe. However, there are some problems gradually happening coming from this sense of security. In other words, setting a password makes people put themselves into another dangerous situation without realizing. In some cases, more problems occur after setting a password. Recently, lots of sexual pictures of celebrities were hacked by computer hackers because these victims had once trusted this cloud computing service and set a password confidently. Some people hack facebook accounts and create Internet scams. To sum up, even though passwords are still quite important, make sure to remain cautious.
You have an excellent vocabulary!! Most of the mistakes are tense issues or singular/plural verbs. If you have any questions about why I changed anything specifically feel free to ask!! :)
0 votedJanuary 8, 20151Taking a chat
hi,everybody ,this is my first english write,And I believe I will be write more and more.My favorite TV show is the big bang theory and friends.So I want to say which is better that the big bang theory or Friends.Jist a world I like sheldon very much.he always said bezinge
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Hi, everybody. This is my first time writing in English, and I believe I will be writing more and more. My favorite TV shows are The Big Bang Theory and Friends. I want to say that The Big Bang Theory is better than Friends. I like Sheldon very much. He always says "bazinga".
***I'm unclear what you meant by the yellow sentence, so I changed it a little, but I'm not sure if it's what you wanted to say.
I just wanted to say that this is excellent work for your first time writing!! I also like watching Big Bang Theory and Friends too :)
0 votedJanuary 8, 20151My Family
There are 5 personpeople(1) in my family. M: m(2)y grandmother, my father, my mother, my younger brother and Imyself(3).
My grandfather passed away 14 years ago. I'mI was(4) so sad at that time. My grandmother is a quiet, kindly lady. She brought me up.
My father is a math teacher and my mom is a office worker. They are busy and dedicated.
My younger brother is a middle-school-student. He studies hard and enjoys(5) reading.
I do love my families and they love me too. They don't tell me but I know it.1: person is singular, since there is more than one person, you must use "people"
2: In speech, this wouldn't make a difference... more of a written grammar thing. Sentences need a verb, so this part cannot be a standalone sentence
3: "I" is the reflexive form that performs actions: "I eat food" "Him and I eat food." When the recipient of the action is reflexive, then it should be "myself" instead. "I looked at myself" or "I cleaned myself." Colloquially, you could probably say "me" here instead of "myself", but myself is more correct.
4: "I'm" or "I am" is present tense; since this happened 14 years ago, you must use the past tense, hence "I was"
5: "enjoy": "I enjoy" "You enjoy" and "They enjoy"...but "He/she enjoys" or "John enjoys" or "Jane enjoys"
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There are 5 people in my family: my grandmother, my father, my mother, my younger brother and myself.
My grandfather passed away 14 years ago. I was so sad at that time. My grandmother is a quiet, kindly lady. She brought me up.
My father is a math teacher and my mom is a office worker. They are busy and dedicated.
My younger brother is a middle-school-student. He studies hard and enjoys reading.
I do love my families and they love me too. They don't tell me but I know it.You did an excellent job! I had to search extra hard cause there were very few mistakes :) Keep up the good work!!
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