Ielts preparation letter could you help thanks

Write a letter to the course director. In your letter:
• explain your interest in the course
• describe your problems
• find out if a refund is possible

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing in response to the your advertisement given on your website regarding about a tennis course in London, England. <em>(or United Kingdom)</em>
I have always wanted to take dreamed of staring a tennis course and I am very interested in joining your club.
On the website it states there is information that tennis course lasts for six weeks
Unfortunately, I am afraid that I have to return be back to Russia on the 30th of August so would be unable I won’t be able to enjoy the whole six weeks course. Would it be Is it possible for me to get a partial refund if I were to will attend the course for only four weeks rather than instead of six weeks.
 Furthermore, Also, could you please advise whether I would be required to provide my own racket and balls I would like to know if I should buy any rackets or balls for the my course as I could not n’t find this information on your website.
Yours faithfully,
Ann Shawn

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Hello!
How are things? What's the weather like? I hope you and your family  are in good health and in high spirits.
As for me, I am fine and enjoying my trip in to the UK. I have been staying here for two weeks already.
Yesterday I was in at the Tower of London. It's an amazing place and gorgeous to look at. So amazing, so gorgeous the place is.  I especially liked our guide. He was so clever and witty<em>('witty' is an adjective which means 'a person who speaks with humour')</em> spoke with humour and made making us laugh a lot. It is so great that many of the families who work at the Tower live there <em>(or live onsite)</em> too.   live inside Tower who work for Tower. I think it is a clever idea/ makes sense so wise - and is a great perk of the job.
I think I mentioned  in on my previous letter to you that I managed to visit such places of interest as like the Kensington Gardens, the Science Museum and so on. I love it so much there. I absolutely loved it there.
Tomorrow I am going to Cambridge to visit the Orthodox Church in honour of Saint Isaak Syrin and of course, as Cambridge is reputed to be one of the most beautiful cities in the world, I'll be taking to have a sightseeing tour too around it.
On Monday I am going to Brompton Cemetery to visit the grave of Anthony of Sourozh.
As for my daughter, I skype with her every day. She is having lots of fun in Crimea and has even started going on horse riding lessons.
That's all my news.
Waiting for good news from you.  to hear from you.
Lots of fun love

<em>Hi! Nice to see you back!</em>

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Hello!
How are things? What's the weather like? I hope you are and your family are in good health and happy happy and well.
Sorry for not writing for so long. Let me try to explain you my reasons why I haven't been able to write.
All For the whole of June and the first two weeks half of July I have was been busy in a the school garden by weeding and planting some plants flowers and vegetables. ( I have planted lots of beetroot so when I am back at work in September I hope to get some when it's ready to harvest  harvest from it).
My twin sister and elder sister made me a birthday present in March when I turned 35 - a trip to the UK. For my 35th birthday in March, my sisters treated me to a trip to the UK. 
I have been in the UK for two weeks already now and I like it very much. I have managed to visit such places of interest like Kensington Gardens, Scientific  The Science Museum, The British Museum, The National Gallery, I've enjoyed the a glimpse of Buckingham Palace and Kensington Palace. I love it here so much here.
Last Sunday I was in went to a monastery in Essex and have already twice I visited Russian Orthodox Church in London twice.
Yesterday, I visited Mersea island which was beautiful. It was such a beautiful landscape. Tomorrow I am planning to visit the Tower (of London?) and next Sunday I'm off to Cambridge.
My daughter are is in Crimea with my sister.
So that's all my news.
I hope get good news to hear from you soon.

Please correct these sentences

1. Ann endures an abusive behavior of her friends. They inflict pain her every time.

<em>1, Ann puts up with abusive behaviour from her boyfriends. She gets hurt every time. </em>

I think from the context 'boyfriend' is required here. 'friend' could be a man or a woman.  To 'inflict pain' makes it sound more physical not emotional. 

2. Ann always clings to her friends, even if they cheat her.

<em>2. Ann always stays with (her) boyfiends, even if they cheat on her. </em>

3. Eventually she will not so stubborn and find a new decent friend.

3. I'm not sure that 'eventually' is the correct word here. I think 'perhaps' is more appropriate. I suggest this version

<em>3. 'Perhaps she'll change one day and find herself a decent boyfriend instead.'</em>

4. Maybe she can't make accurate choice or maybe she rotates in wrong society.

<em>4. Maybe It's because she makes bad choices or moves in the wrong circles </em>

5. Frankly, she is not sincere too, so she attracts so-called "trash".

<em>5. To be honest, she is not sincere either, so she attracts 'trash'/ losers.</em> (a good word to use here for a bad boyfiend would be 'loser'

6. She always performs secondary role in any relationships.

<em>6. She is always the submissive partner in her relationships.</em>

7. People treat to her without respect, because she is devoid respect to herself.

<em>7. People disrespect her because she does not respect herself.</em>

8. Regardless she is fabulous creature, she is addicted to strange men such as careless scoundrel or absent-minded bachelor.

<em>8, Even though she is an amazing person, she has lousy taste in men and always goes for the wrong type like players or committment phobes. </em>

I have tried to work out what you mean by these  negative types of 'strange men' In English we say 'the wrong type'.  'player' is a man who likes to have lots of girlfriends  and 'committment phobe' is for a man who does not want to be in a long term relationship.

9. She can't determine work out/see who is good and who is bad.
10. She is my close friend despite of her traits.

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Hello!
How are you doing? What's the weather like?
I hope you are doing great.
The weather is good here but from time to time it is a bit windy.
These days I am volunteering Recently I have been volunteering at a in Bulgarian church.
<em>Recently + present perfect continuous needed. Indicates you started in recent past and are continuing the action.</em>
One of the workers got ill and while she is recovering I am helping [out] there.
I am gradually overcoming my depression step by step and soon I hope it will fade away in the near future. <em>Perhaps ‘clear up’/’improve’ for ‘fade away’.</em>
My daughter is staying at my sister's. She likes to sleep there.
In three weeks I am going to have take a summer holiday. My colleagues and are counting down [the] days till our much deserved time off the anticipated deserved holiday. These year we [will be going] go to the Black Sea again this year. <em>Remember. Adverbial phrases of time usually sound better at the end of a sentence.</em>
My daughter is looking forward to see[ing] the sea again.
Unfortunately, I have no time to spend on my English or and in reading.
That's all my boring news
Waiting for [some] good news from you

<em>Well written! Just think where best to put your time adverbs. Also, did you know that thyroid problems are a physiological cause of depression, so maybe if you get the treatment you talked about earlier it may help. Best wishes. :-)</em>

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Hello!
How are you doing? What's the weather like?
I hope you are doing great.
The weather is good here but from time to time it is a bit windy.
These day I am volunteering in Bulgarian church. One of the worker got ill and while she is recovering I am helping there.
I am overcoming my depression step by step and soon I hope it will fade away.
My daughter is staying at my sister's. She likes to sleep there.
In three weeks I am going to have summer holiday. My colleagues and are counting down days till the anticipated deserved holiday. These year we will go to the Black Sea again.
My daughter is looking forward to see the sea again.
Unfortunately, I have no time on my English and in reading.
That's all my boring news
Waiting for good news from you

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Hi!
How are things? What's the weather like? It's hot but blustery here. <em>('Blustery' is correct, but not very common. Perhaps 'quite windy' sounds more colloquial)</em>
Tomorrow I must go to the GP to take get a referral to (see) a thyroid specialist. My recent medical check up showed (that) O I have a hormone imbalance, plus my thyroid glad gland is enlarged and contains nodules there are knots in it. As for my blood pressure, that's it's ok,  but my a pulse is a bit faster than it should be.
We started a fast today as an act of devotion to (Jesus' disciples) St. Peter and St. Paul From today we have Fast devoted to Disciples of Jesus-Peter and Paul. In the morning I had a porridge without milk but at work for dinner I couldn't resist seduction I gave in to temptation  and ate a chicken cutlet for lunch. Plus, I have had a packet of sour cream left in my fridge so which I decided to eat anyway I should eat it up in spite of the Fast.
I am looking forward to my holidays at time off from work. All of us who work there coworkers are counting down the days until when we can are free to enjoy ourselves.
Now I must finish as I am going for a walk with my daughter.<em> (Very abrupt. Perhaps 'I have to finish for now as I am off for a walk....)</em>
Write soon

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Good day to you. <em>Nothing wrong with this, but is is not an idiomatic way to begin a personal letter/email. Perhaps 'Hello!' or 'Hi!' would be better here</em> How are you keeping? What's the weather like? 

It's hot and a bit windy here.
Now when  that the school year has finished, I am working in at a school camp summer camp (or) summer school. We are having lots of fun with the kids. As my daughter's kindergarten is also closed too she goes comes to work with me. She likes to go there and play with the schoolkids.
During my work till 3 pm My working day ends at pm/I finish work at 3pm, then so my daughter and I come home early, eat something for dinner and then go to the playground which is not far from our hour. She has got lots of playmates. She is an introvert (<em>do you mean extrovert here?</em>)  like me and likes to be with others. It upsets me when some of the kids refuse to play with her, as she gets disappointed and flustered. <em>(Not sure these are the best adjectives here. Perhaps 'upset' rather than flustered')  </em>
As after divorce I took back my maiden surname  After my divorce I reverted to my maiden name. This means I now have to change (it on) all my documents. I have changed all of them except my Tax Certificate which I hope to do it today after work.
So what are your plans for summer? I am planning to go to Azerbaijan where I was born. It is was a former Soviet Republic, but now it's an independent country. Last week my mum left for Azerbaijan.
I wish you a great sunny warm summer  Hope you have a lovely summer!
Write back to me, please soon! (<em>Sounds more idiomatic. Yours is not incorrect)</em>
Nadya

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How is everything? What's the weather like? Here, it's sunny and warm. 'here' better at end of sentence

I have just come home from hospital. 'I have just got back from the hospital'.  'from hospital' is correct, but implies that you were there for more than 24 hours as an in-patient.  Unfortunately, the results of my blood test results  isn't  weren't good. It showed/indicated that I have a high level of serious hormone imbalance. On Thursday Again adverbial phrases of time are better at end of sentence.  I will have to have an am x- ray of my thyroid glad. gland.
This time last Last year at this time I also had a high imbalance of hormones  serious hormone imbalance and an  x ray showed that my thyroid lad gland was  is enlarged and contained nodules. there were knots if it. I think this year the results will be the same again.
Yesterday I got my new passport yesterday. Better at end of sentence. So now I can apply for my visa now.  but Unfortunately I've been unable to get through to my sister's mobile for the past two days and I need her help these two days I could get through my sister by mobile as she must help me to fill in the questionaries forms for the  Bulgarian embassy.
Keep in touch
Hugs Lots of love

I sympathise. I have thyroid problems too!