Could you correct my post please many thanks in advance

ou should spend about 20 minutes on this task.
You ordered a new cheque book from your bank two weeks ago but you have received nothing.

Write a letter to the manager complaining about the bad service. Say when and how you ordered the cheque book. Ask how much longer you will have to wait and ask the manager what action he will take over this matter.
You should write at least 150 words.

You do NOT need to write your own address. Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir,
Model answer

Dear Sir,
I am writing regarding the poor your bad service I have received from in your bank, I ordered a new cheque book more than two weeks ago (Adverbial phrases of time are better at end of sentence) . I filled in the appropriate form when I was ordered a cheque book and submitted the filled form it to a member of staff/customer service agent officer. However, I am yet to receive a cheque book Since then I have not be  any cheque bool and none of the emails I have sent  all my emails to find out when my cheque book would to be delivered have been answered. were left unanswered. I have called your bank several times Several times I called to your bank but no one from the staff could tell me give me an answer when my the cheque book would will be ready.

I would like to point out want to pay your attention that it is quite urgent for me to get my new cheque book as soon as possible as I need to resolve for sorting out some my business issues which require payment by cheque should be pain only by cheque.

Please inform me as soon as possible how much longer I will have to wait and an explanation as to why your bank failed  and I expect your explanations about your banks failure to provide me with a new cheque book in time. I would also like to know what actions you are going to take regarding this poor service from your staff.
I have been a loyal customer for your bank for more than ten years and this it is the first time when I am I have been treated so badly and have been disappointed to see such It is very disappointing and an inappropriate attitude to customers from such resapectable bank.

I am looking forward to hearing from you soon,

Yours sincerely,

Tom Brown

Could you correct my post please many thanks in advance

ou should spend about 20 minutes on this task.
You ordered a new cheque book from your bank two weeks ago but you have received nothing.

Write a letter to the manager complaining about the bad service. Say when and how you ordered the cheque book. Ask how much longer you will have to wait and ask the manager what action he will take over this matter.
You should write at least 150 words.

You do NOT need to write your own address. Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir,
Model answer
Dear Dir,
I am writing regarding your bank's bad service. in your bank More than two weeks ago I ordered a new cheque book. I filled in the appropriate form when I was ordered the cheque book and submitted the completed form to a customer representative of the bank. Since then I have not received any cheque book and all my emails to find out when my cheque book to be delivered were left unanswered. Several times I called to your bank concerning this issue, but no one from the staff could give me an answer as to when the cheque book will be ready.
I want to call your attention to the fact that it is quite urgent for me to get my new cheque book as soon as possible for sorting out some my business issues which can be paid only by cheque.
Please inform me as soon as possible how much longer I will have to wait and provide an adequate explanation about your bank's failure to provide me with a new cheque book within a reasonable time.
I would like to know what actions you are going to take regarding this inadequate service from your staff.
I have been a loyal customer for your bank for more than ten years and it is the first time that I have been treated in this manner. It is very disappointing and shows an inapproapriate attitude to customers from such a respectable bank.
I am looking forward to hearing from you soon.

Yours sincerely,

Tom Brown

[Good job.]