can any native revise this peace of writing for me plz :) ? any grammatical or punctuation correctio

this is my letter of application for a university :
Dear Madam / Sir,

I am Egyptian and I graduated from the Faculty of Commerce, Alexandria University's Faculty of Commerce with a major in Accounting major. All courses are were entirely taught in the English language. I received with a good grades during my time at Alexandria University and achieved an even higher grade during my fourth year. good (fourth year with a very good grade).

I have work experience in Egypt as I am currently working as a store manager in an international book company. and I noticed that I did my best effort that I could give to my company. I gave the company my best efforts, but I feel that my best efforts were not sufficient and more could have been given. But this is not sufficient for me. frankly, I am not convinced yet with what I did.

I believe that I will excel do much better if I have am given the opportunity to learn and to be trained and developed through by your internationally recognized master's program degree of International Management at your prestigious university. I admire that your program that emphasizes putting theoretical concepts learned in the classroom courses into practice with through work placement through the with collaboration of the with industry. As I see saw the impact that those who have completed your program make holders of such degree in many developing countries, such as Egypt. Not only do they have many opportunities, but they are also were considered as important scholars within in their societies.
for your further consideration.

I took completed the TOEFL IBT toefl ibt test in 2011 with and scored of 83. and I registered to redo take the test it again on at June 14, 2014. because i know that the score only valid for only two years. So I request permission to submit the second score after the deadline. I hope that it will be a possibility to give me a permission to send the score after the deadline 15 May once I finish it .

Sentences

Hello Everyone! Could you please help me with these sentences below?

Is it ok to say: "He was boring TO me" / " He was boring WITH me". I would simply say: "He was boring."

"There ISN'T a lot of time for that." / " There AREN'T a lot of time for that" I would say: There is not enough time for ____. Or I would say: There is not enough time to _____. 

" Would you THREE like a cup of tea?" Would the three of you like a cup of tea?

" The NEED TO GROW in her career made her a very ambitious woman." This sentence is okay the way it is written. 

Thank you! :)

Play Baseball

Every Sunday I go to play baseball with my team. I'm center fielder and I'm practicing for to be pitcher. the Baseball is one of the my favorite sports that more like me.

Good job! I like baseball too. 

Learn languages

I'm brazillian, and I really like English.
I just love this website because I found a lot of people who share with me the same love to learn different languages.
For me, studying a new language is like a game. of new phoneme stranger sounds and You start to make some noises that you never imagined that it would be possible to do make with just with your mouth.
To learn a language is to exchange your world and your ideas, and to minimize the prejudice between cultures and countries.
It's a hobbie and a way to make money. Whatever your purpose, I always believe we are making doing more than we think we do.

I hope you enjoy this little (and wrong) text. I hope you could can help me. :)

You did an amazing job! I hope my correction helps you.