Kite I saw

When I was a little girl, I swore to never lose my childishness; that I will never grow up to be a boring, clumsy, adult. I kept my words for years. I learned how things work in a bank, I learned how to drive a car, I learned how to cook, and I got my first job as a waitress, but I was still willing to sit on the floor and play with the toy bricks.
Then I went to college.
Away frow home, the changes were happening in slience. Day one, I stoped feeling for enjoying the weather. Day two, I bought a purse instead of a book. The environment changed, and I found an easy way to live. Till recently something changed my mind again.
I’m living nearby a construction plant. There is a huge pile of earth dirt on the side of the road. One day, I saw a bunch of kids playing on top of it. The dirt gets on their shoes and clothes, and it’s kind of dangerous too, because they might fall. So, I was thinking “Wow, bad parenting.” And then some time goes on by, a few days after that, when I was standing by the window drinking my tea, when I saw them again. Only this time, they were flying a kite. The tail of that kite was so long, you can saw could see it swimming in the light blue sky. That was a beautiful kite, and those kids, they created it. I wish I was one of them.

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Great work! I only corrected a few words. I also corrected some punctuation mistakes, but I did not highlight them. 

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I think retaining your inner child is important. Never get too caught up in the now and what society wants. If you forget how to have fun and be happy, what is the ponit?

我覺得每個人需要記得他們的童年。父母，社會， 朋友，都像你表現你的年紀，但是別忘你的童年。

Hello friends, 

I like that I want to talk in other languages. I want to learn to speak English. When I was a student in primary school, my mother got me an English language teacher.

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That is a good start. Keep it up!

Finding

Last year, I graduated from my college. At first I thought it would be very easy to find a job. I got almost all the relvent certificates during my study and also the bachelor degree..... One year has past, I understand so much of life. Life is so hard for me.
I realized love is fragile , it can t be tested by time and distance. My world outlook, outlook on life, and values have been overturned totally. Job is the next most important thing in my next life.
Being real, I maybe half right, or half wrong. I have no passion, no hope, even I forgot my first dream. How can have I become like this. It must not be me, it's someone else who has stolen my soul . I am finding myself now ..........

Overall you did good. I am not sure if I understood 100% what you mean't in your "I maybe right maybe wrong, ..." sentence, so my correction there may not be the best.