9/21/2014

The oldest library in the world, the Royal Library of Alexandria, was built in approximately 300 B.C. in Alexandria, Egypt. Where is it now? It was accidentally burned down by Julius Caeser during the Alexandria War.        Example: Tokyo, Japan not Tokyo in Japan

The library was the largest and most significant library of the ancient world. It was dedicated to the Muses, the nine goddesses of the arts. With the huge collection of works, a reading room, a dining room , meeting rooms, gardens, and lecture halls; the library had inevitably become a place where many famous thinkers of the ancient world flocked.

In 48 B.C., Caeser occupied the city, after defeating the Egyptian fleet and was residing in the palace. Unexpectedly, he was attacked again by a sizable force. This time, Caeser found himself in a sorry plight, he took a decisive action and set fire to his own ships, he then sent these fire ships into the harbor. His plan was a great success and the enemy fled quickly aflame. Unfortunately the fire did not stop there, it jumped onto the dockside that was laden with flammable merchandise ready for export. And The fire spread on land and finally sent the Great Library together with its priceless scrolls into ash.

Merchandise is a word that can be used for singular and plural cases. 

BC = B.C.

I was taught to never begin a sentence with AND. 

 ".., and lecture halls, " = There are so many commas that using a semicolon would be better than using another comma. 

You are a great writer. I may of missed something, but I tried my best to get the little mistakes that you made. 

I did not sleep well yesterday. I think watching television is a dangerous decision before going to bed, especially if you are watching world news. News in television are making makes people worry about their life and future. Therefore, my advice is to stay be away from the television and you will be close(r) to sleeping and happiness.

You want to put a period down when you are done expressing a thought.

 -I did not sleep well yesterday, I think watching television is a dangerous decision before going to bed, especially if you are watching world news. <--RUN ON SENTENCE

I hope I helped. 

The Stroke of today

<em>I'm going to the park. A place I can release my pressure.There are many people there because it is a holiday.</em><a id="_GPLITA_0" style="text-decoration: underline;" title="Click to Continue > by I Want This" href="#">The fish</a> in the lake  <em>are </em>more pressure<em>d</em> today <em>because there are </em>more people feeding <em>them</em> and <em>their companions are grabbing </em>the food crazily.(Weird sentence.)Fortunately, <em>they do not have to worry about having nothing to eat.</em>

 There are different ways to correct this.

<em>I'm going to the park.</em>  GO: I want to go to the park. I go to the park. 

<em>A place I can release my pressure.</em> <--english speakers may say "Relax" "unwind" or "rest" --> <em>A place I can relax. </em>

I used ARE because I used GOING.

IT : singular     They: plural  

Hopeful I have helped. Keep it up and you will get better!

Pleass Bless Her

I have not learned English and/or wrote a diary for a long time, finally I can write something today. My Spring Festival holiday is over and during the holiday I helped my old classmate with an interview for a flight attendant job; like to buy formal clothes and toiletries, preparing the materials for her self-introduction, keeping her hair trimmed and help her with clothes when she was interviewing, etc. She thinks that I have some experience because of I had a chance to be airline stewardess. We went to Qingdao where she interviews for a week, we were almost tired every day and we didn’t have time to walk around, we waited until she passed the preliminary examination, secondary examination and written examination, then we went back to Jinan. She is waiting for the result and to be told whether she will go to Beijing for medical checks right now. I’m so nervous even more than her. In fact, my old classmate wanted to interview international aviations because she thinks they have low requirements, but I suggested she give up the idea, she told me that if she doesn’t pass the domestic company's interview/evaluation, then she would like to go to Guangzhou to interview with the international airline next week. I wish her all the best and I don’t want to go to Guangzhou next week, that’s so tiring, hahaha. :D

Grammar mistakes all over, but I mostly was looking at the words  you used and spelling and how you wrote the sentences. 

Tired = present tense, I am tired. They are tired.

Tiring= used with sentences like: It was tiring. That is tiring. 

before a noun with a vowel (a,e,i,o,u) you add : an ; It was an interesting day. That was an horrible thing to say. That was an awesome job. 

I hope I helped. Keep up the good work.

My bedroom

This is my bedroom. It's clean and nice to live in. My favorite part of my room is my bed (you could say it other ways too) on the right with a bluepillow and a quilt on it. There is a big rectangular table near the bed. The closet is next to the table. There are many clothes in the closet which are were bought by my mother. The blue trash bin is behind the door while the big mirror is under the air-conditioner.
I really love my bedroom. It is so comfortable and is filled with my favourite blue!

 is filled with my favorite blue - is worded weird. Do you mean it is painted blue?

are - present tense

were - past tense. Bought is past tense so you would use were instead of are

Google translate

我最喜欢的蓝色 - 充满了怪异的措辞。你的意思是它被涂成蓝色的？

are - 现在时态

were -过去时态. 买的是过去时态，所以你可以使用，were 而不是 are.