Music and Politics

You are likely to think music and politics have nothing to do with each other, right? Well, actually, they do.

In general, art is used to express feelings. It can be love songs, dance hits and even songs about political opinion. You can't criticize the way society lives with music. Isn't that amazing? 

When you listen critically to music, you get more involved with its lyrics. It's surprisingly lovely.

NOTE:

There is no comma between "hits" and "and".

"listen to music as a critical listener" is not wrong, but a bit awkward.

"love songs, dance hits, songs of political opinion" is a more consistent grouping.

It flows well.  Well done!

an Essay Written by Someone Else

This composition was marked band 8 in an IELTS test. What do you think of it? Do you detect any mistakes? Is it very natural? Thanks for your time.



I do agree to with the statement that children brought up in poor families are better prepared to deal with the problems of adult life than children brought up by wealthy parents.

Children of poor parents are prematurely exposed to the problems of adult life eg   e.g.  learning how to survive on a low family income and sacrificing luxuries for essential items. These children begin to see the ‘realities’ of life in their home or and social environment. Their parents parents' own struggles serve as an example to them.

These children are taught necessary skills for survival as an adult from a very early age. Many children eg work in the weekends or holidays either to either collect some pocket money or even to contribute to their families’ income. A good example is the many children who accompany their parents to sell produce at the market. They are making a direct contribution to their families in terms of labor or and income.

Children of poor families also are highly motivated. They tend to set high goals to improve their economic and social situation. A relevant example would be Mr. Bill Gates, founder of Microsoft Corporation. He had an impoverished background but he used his talent and motivation to set up the worlds largest computer organization. (note: This statement is factually incorrect.)

However, there are some problems that children from poor backgrounds do encounter. Many of these children who are ‘robbed’ of their childhood eg while working, may feel cheated. They often sometimes turn to crime. This, however, is a small group. (note: Since it is a small group, the incidence would not be often.)

In summing up summary, children with impoverished backgrounds are better able to deal with problems of adult life because of early exposure, family role models and shear sheer motivation

Taking the SAT

Hello, ladies and gentlemen.

I can't say if I am IN the 10th grade at OR IN the 11th grade, as the school system in Brazil is different from the US.(PERIOD) one, but I'm 15 years old and I'm seriously thinking about taking the SAT. I have two main reasons FOR DOING IT: 1) I want to ATTEND a super top university IN THE US, so I'll have to start practicing for the test as early as I can (although I'm afraid it's already TOO late). (PERIOD) 2) I want to take part IN Yale's summer courses. (PERIOD) Although the test is not obligatory, the application PROVIDES A BLANK SPACE to RECORD your SAT scores in case you have taken it. (PERIOD)  SINCE I WOULD LIKE to get financial aid on it, I think it's quite necessary TO TAKE THE exam.
I'm studying by "Cracking the SAT 2012", a book FROM The Princeton Review. I intend to take the exam IN early March, so that I can get the results and send to it to the university at the end of the month.
Could somebody PLEASE tell me how much time the SAT SCORERS spend BEFORE SENDING our results back please? Do you have any advices ADVICE or comments? If so, please (NO COMMA) let me know. It WOULD be so helpful!

Well, It's it's time to go and study a little more.
Good LUCK TO EVERYONE ELSE WHO WILL BE TAKING the SAT.
See you soon.

What a great idea!  Best of luck to you!  I don't know exactly how long, but I think it takes 8-10 weeks to get results back.

Taking the SAT

Hello, ladies and gentlemen.

I can't say if I am at the 10th grade or at the 11th grade, as the school system in Brazil is different from the US one, but I'm 15 years old and I'm seriously thinking about taking the SAT. I have two main reasons to do that: 1) I want to major in the US at a super top university, so I'll have to start practicing for the test as early as I can (although I'm afraid it's already late); 2) I want to take part on Yale's summer courses; although the test is not obligatory, the application gives you some blanks to put your SAT scores in case you have taken it; as I want to get financial aid on it, I think it's quite necessary taking the exam.
I'm studying by "Cracking the SAT 2012", a book of The Princeton Review. I intend to take the exam on early March, so that I can get the results and send to it to the university at the end of the month.
Could somebody tell me how much time the SAT correctors spend to send our results back please? Do you have any advices or comments? If so, please, let me know. It will be so helpful!

Well, It's time to go and study a little more.
Good lucky for every other ones who will take the SAT too.
See you soon.