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toefl independent essay, day 13
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Agree or disagree : personal experiences is more valuable than the knowledge we gain from books.
Essay
It is critically important to find your own way of studying according to your personal preferences and abilities. I am of the opinion that knowledge which can be gained on your own is much more valuable than information received from articles and books. I will explore the reasons why I feel this way in the following essay.
To begin with, it has been proved by scientists that the information which was connected with an emotional event is saved by the brain more precisely and quickly transformed into a long-term memory. Everybody has a recollection about an event that brought him a plethora of happiness, for example about a birthday in a childhood, when parents tried to create an atmosphere of magic for their children. Doubtlessly, every experience that we receive by our own is connected with a particular emotion. My own experience is a compelling example of it. Three years ago, when I graduated from my university, my classmates organised a celebration with a disco and champagne. This night fulfilled me with enjoy and I can clearly recall every conversation that I had had on this event. In contrast, I can not remember a thing from the course of theoretical physics that I have passed at the same time. This example demonstrates how emotions can help us to recall the particular experience from the past.
Second, sometimes it is necessary to do something using your hands just because there are no books that can teach you how to do it. It is crucial to have your own knowledge of how to adjust microscopes in a laboratory, when you are a scientist, and no article in the world can help you with this. For instance, when I came to my laboratory, I had no understanding of how to conduct experiments. Firstly, I had tried to find an information about the particular technique in articles, but I faced with the absence of clear description. Nevertheless, I began to adjust the device by my own and sooner achieved success. If I had not begn to try to conduct the experience without a manual, I would never have had a publication in a famous magazine.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that personal experience is much more informative and helpful than the information in books. This is because of better recollection, when the event is emotional coloured and because of practical skills that can not be acquired anywhere except by your own.
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toefl independent essay, day 12
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Some people like to travel with a companion. Other people prefer to travel alone. Which do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your choice.
Essay
It is critically important to make a trip in a way according to your personal preferences for enjoying the process. I am of the opinion that travelling with a partner is much preferable than travelling on your own. I will explore why I feel this way in the following essay.
To begin with, it is easier to solve unexpected problems together, when you can share your opinion with your companion and discuss probable solutions. People with different backgrounds usually have different opinions on the same situation. My own experience is a compelling example of it. Two years ago, I was going with my friends from Moscow to Minsk by bus, when a hotel that was meant to be our housing to sleep that night suddenly cancelled the reservation. First reaction was a shock and fear of sleeping on a street, because we could not afford to pay for a new hotel room. Nevertheless, my friend had a clear mind and quickly made a phone call to his acquaintance who was living in Minsk. As a result, we saved our money and slept in his house, due to his understanding and hospitality. This example demonstrates how the trip could be spoilt without the help of your companion.
Second, it is always better to have conversations during the trip and not to feel lonely. You can always discuss a local culture or national cuisine and improve your knowledge with facts that your partner are sharing with you. For instance, once I had a brilliant trip to Milan with skiing and shopping. But this trip would not have been such intense and informative, if I had not had my Italian cousin with me. We spent hours walking in a historical centre of the town and this stroll was fulfilled with a plethora of facts about the government and culture of a medieval Italy. As I found learning history with textbooks a bit challenging, it is always a pleasure for me to learn about it in person. Now I want to pay more attention to the Italian history and come back in Milan in a year.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that travelling with another person is much better that have a trip all alone. This is because of help in difficult situations and because of entertainment during the trip.
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toefl independent essay, day 11
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The university will now spend more money on sports and athletic facilities than they do on the campus libraries. Do you think this is a good idea?
Essay
It is critically important to spend the university’s budget in a right way with the focus on current students’ needs. I am of the opinion that funding libraries is much more important than spending money on sports facilities and equipment. I will explore why I feel this way in the following essay.
To begin with, books in libraries have to be up-to-date for the scientific purposes because of ongoing technical progress. Every year a plethora of new articles and textbooks are published all around the world and success in a scientific research could not appear without the access to this new information. For instance, two years ago I was working in a biological laboratory when my supervisor decided to take a look at strange results that was obtained from MRI of a mouse’s brain. We spent days trying to explain the observed phenomena, but it was challenging. Nevertheless, we did not give up and begin to look at currently published articles. As soon as we found in one of them the description of a quite similar experiment, we understood what we had observed and continued our experiments in a different way. If we had not seen this article in a university library, we would have continued to waste our time trying to find an explanation.
Second, sports can be done without any facilities at all. There are many types of sports that can be chosen according to your personal preference and health restrictions which do not need any extra equipment. My own experience is a compelling example of it. When I was enrolled in my university, I decided to take part in a local running club. In our daily training we use only professional clothes and small balls with sand to improve our force. Also, participation in a such club was free of charge. Training with people who have the same interests encourages you to train more efficient and not to skip workouts. Moreover, I found my best friend in this club and won a number of running competitions. This example illustrates that sports can be done for free and without any facilities.
In conclusion, I believe that spending money on the the libraries’ needs is more important for university than funding sports clubs. This is because of scientific goals and because of unnecessary expenses of sports.
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toefl independent essay, day 10
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In your opinion, which of the following is the most important characteristic of a coworker?
willingness to learn new things
the ability to make other people laugh
Essay
It is crucially important to be easy-going and friendly with your colleagues to create a cosy atmosphere on your work place. However, this is not the only one characteristic that make you a perfect coworker. I strongly believe that the most important characteristics for coworkers are the ability to receive new knowledge and constantly development of your professional skills. I will explore why I feel this way in the following essay.
First, acquiring new skills allows people to be more self-confident and earn more money, especially in start-ups. People who prefer life-long learning seem to be more interesting as a partners in conversations and frequently achieve success. For instance, two years ago my fiance has been working in a startup that dealt with quantum technologies. However this field of science does not developed well, companies willingly buy new quantum technologies and therefore such startups often become successful fast. So, my fiance and his colleagues discovered new technology that was promising, but they did not know how to apply it because of the absence of an appropriate computer. That is why they decided to learn how to create quantum computer and use it in application. Nowadays they are one of the most fast-growing startup in Russia. This example illustrates how important it is to coworker to learn continuously.
Second, it is always a pleasure to have a conversation with a clever man. Chatting with colleagues on their free time can improve professional relationships. My own experience is a compelling example of it. Three years ago I became an assistant in a biological laboratory. My supervisor was one of the most clever man that I have ever met. He helped me a lot with my bachelor dimploma and we showed the results of our work in an international conference. Soon we became friends and now I am in the most promising group doing my favourite science with him as a group leader. If he had not been so intelligent and well-readed, my career would have been different from what I have now.
In conclusion, I believe that willingness to acquire new skills and continuously learn are the most important qualities for coworkers. This is because of more cosy atmosphere in conversation, when speak with an intelligent man, and earn more money.
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toefl independent essay, day 9
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Some people prefer to live in a small town. Others prefer to live in a big city. Which place would you prefer to live in? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.
Essay
It is critically important nowadays to live in a place with appropriate conditions and infrastructure according to your needs. Personally, I strongly believe that life in a big city is the best choice for me. I will explore the reasons for this in the following essay.
First, you can reach different districts of a town in a half an hour using public transport and do not spend much money on it. In contrast, you always need to have your own car, when you live in a village, because it is the only one opportunity to reach your destination in the absence of public transport. For instance, sometimes I use underground to go to my university, which situated in the suburb of Moscow. However the large majority of people think that possessing a car is a privilege and luxury, it is really useful and comfortable to travel using a public transport and do not think about traffic jams. I can definitely say, that riding in the underground save me an hour a day. This example demonstrates the usefulness of evolved infrastructure in a city.
Another advantage of living in a big city is an availability of medicine. It is well known that salaries in megalopolises for doctors and nurseries is much higher than in a countryside, therefore the best service in a health care can be found in a big city. My personal experience is a compelling example of it. Five years ago, my grandparents decided to move on in a small village near Moscow, because of air pollution and a desire to grow their own plants. But the worst nightmare became reality. One day my grandfather woke up with strong headache which later appear to be a stroke. Calling an ambulance was the first thing they had done, but there were no free places in a local hospital. If only they had lived in a city, my grandfather would have been alive and health. This example illustrated how the scarcity of medical personnel and hospitals in a neighbourhood can destroy somebody’s life.
In conclusion, I believe, that life in a big city is much preferable than in a small village. This is because of developed infrastructure of public transport and availability of medical help.
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toefl independent essay, day 8
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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Human activity is making the earth a worse place to live.
Essay
It is critically important that mankind activity has an impact on every singe life on Earth and people must avoid any destructions of ecosystems. Personally, I believe that the opposite side of technological progress is a deterioration of life conditions for animals and plants. I will explore the reasons for this in the following essay.
To begin with, the water pollution, caused by industrial waste, led to a distinction of number of animals. Every year tons of poison water that was poured out from factories kill marine mammalians and invertebrates. For instance, five years ago an oil station in the Pacific Ocean was destroyed by occasion and tons of oil pour out in the ocean, so the thin layer on water surface had been separated fish from the air until this substance was finally removed. The result of this catastrophe was terrifying. Seagulls and cormorants had wet their wings in a sticky liquid, so they could not fly away and sank. Fishes died out because of absence of oxygen. Nevertheless, the government was worried only about the scarcity of oil for cars and factories. If only the mankind had been more attentive and careful to the environment, the Earth would have been better place to live for all of us. This example illustrates how an occasional accident have led to the death of thousands of animals.
Secondly, heavy metal gases from cars and factories cause thinning of the ozone layer. Also, the air pollution causes the global warming and increasing of lung’s diseases. Despite this dangerous situation, the main ecological problem remains stable. My own experience is a compelling example of it. Earlier, when my grandparents had been working in the oil producing company, they were breathing factory’s wasting gases every single day. As a result, my grandfather was just diagnosed with a lung cancer. In addition, people are worried a lot about the situation with ice in Norway and Iceland. Melting of ice, caused by the global warming, can increase the water level and flood islands. This example demonstrates how one thing can have an impact on all of the planet.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that human activity made ecology much worse and nowadays Earth became more and more dirty and poisoned. This is because of the wasting unrecyclable fluids in oceans and gases in the atmosphere.
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Could you please correct my request for a recommendation letter?
Dear *Prof name*,
could you please be my referee for my MSc program application this winter? Enrolement in a such program is crucialy important for my career as a scientist, because the only one opportunity for me to study neuroscience - is to go in one of europenian universities. I hope this wouldn't take a lot of your time, because I know that you have really intense schedule. I would greatly appreciate it if you could write a letter of recommendation for me and submit it to links you will received closer to application deadlines (probably in January).
Thank you for your time and efforts on my behalf.
Sincerely yours,
Polina
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toefl independent essay, day 7
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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People communicate with each other less than in the past because of the popularity of television. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.
Essay
The spread of digital technologies allowed people to fulfil their lives with entertainment and happiness. Personally, I strongly believe that during the last decade people became more sociable because of the popularity of television. I will explore the reasons why I feel this way in the following essay.
First of all, due to the high speed of delivering information, people gained easy and quick access to news and, as a result, discovered new topics for in-person conversations. Nowadays, if you do not know how to start dialogue, you can mention one of the latest events and discuss it with your partner. For instance, earlier, when the only possibility to know news was a sending messages with a dove, people had to wait weeks before they received new information to talk about. That is why previous generations tended to be withdraw and unsociable. However, nowadays, you can just watch morning news and you will be aware of what happens in the whole world. Even if you have not your own opinion on any topic, you can familiarize with opinions of famous critics or politicians and construct a new one from their ideas. This example demonstrates how television help us to keep up with new events all around the world.
Secondly, the various programs and series allow us to chose the topic of interests and gain knowledge in the field of our hobbies. My own experience is a compelling example of it. When I was a kid, I had been watching BBC series about dinosaurs all day long and imagined being an archaeologist if the future. Having shared this hobby with my friends, I spent a lot of time playing with them and, as a result, have grown in a talkative and easy-going person. However, not only children are interested in such kind of progras. My grandparents usually spend evenings watching historical programs about Middle Ages and then discuss them in a historical community. This example illustrates how television made a new field of interests for children and grown up.
In conclusion, I believe that television helped the mankind to be more sociable. The reason for this is new topics of interests for conversations and quick access to news.
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toefl independent essay, day 6
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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? My lifestyle is easier and more comfortable than the one my grandparents experienced when they were young.
Essay
Due to the technical progress and impoving in healthcare every generation lives better than their ancestors. I strongly believe, that I live more comfortable and have more opportunities than my mother when she was a teenager. I will explore the reasons for this in the following essay.
First of all, young people all around the world, especially women, have an access to education using digital technologies, while the previous generation did not have such opportunity. Because of spread of the internet you can gain a degree even without leaving your house. My own experience is a compelling example of it. My mother had to interrupt her education after school because of absent of universities in her neighbourhood, had decided to work in industry. But she never gave up dreaming about degree and more secured life for her children. That is why I tried to make her dreams come true and just graduated from a top-ranking university. It would not have been possible, if I had not having an access to educational resources in internet and an opportunity to pass a half of exams online. This example demonstrates how the internet helps millenials to reach their educational goals.
Secondly, because of a stable economical situation, many families in Russia can travel abroad and allow themselves to buy more qualitative clothes and home stuff, then twenty years ago. During the last years of the Soviet Union people have lost a vast majority of their savings and became extremelly poor. For instance, my grandparents have been working in the oil producing company and were going to buy a new appartment, when the crisis and denomination broke their plans. They were worried, because it was meant to be a present for their young son, who had just been enroled in the university. Nowadays, I can be sure that my savings are under control of the government and I have no need to afraid that years of my work appear to be a waste of time. This example illustrates how the economics stabilized in last decades and how people became more confident about their future.
In conclusion, I believe that nowadays people’s lifestyle is more restful than it was for previous generations. This is because of the progress in digital technologies and stable economical situation in particular countries.
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toefl independent essay, day 5
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Question
Grades encourage students to work harder at school. Do you agree or disagree? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.
Essay
In my opinion, it is critically important to gain marks for school assignments to correct mistakes and improve your knowledge. I strongly believe, that grades can motivate children to become more diligent and nerdy. I will explore the reasons in the following essay.
First of all, due to comparing marks with each other, pupils can learn in a competition way. It is always a pleasure to feel more clever than anyone else. My own experience demonstrates this reality. Five years ago, when I have studied in the eleventh grade, I had a row with my classmate. She claimed that she is better than I in every subject at school. As I was a clever and hard-working student, I started reading specific literature to gain an extra mark. Soon my grade average point became much better than her. I was proud of myself and earned a scholarship in an international summer school. This example demonstrates, how an improving of your grades can be a competition.
Secondly, because of the feedback, giving by your teacher with a mark, your weaknesses can be easily determined and you receive the opportunity to improve your knowledge in the particular subject. Studying harder topics which you can not stand before is helpful to pass exams and reduce the number of mistakes in next assignments. For instance, once I had a C grade in my training test in mathematics, which I never received before. I was so self-confident in technical subjects, so I was absolutely shocked with this situation. At the beginning, I thought that it is a mistake, but when I saw my assignment with teacher’s correction, I suddenly realised that I need to study more and gain knowledge in statistics to pass an important exam. That is why I began to learn mathematics and found the tutor. As a result, I have passed the final exam with the excellent mark and was invited to the top-ranked university. This example illustrates how important it is to gain a feedback for every of your assignments.
In conclusion, I believe, that marks can inspire students to study better. This is because of a competition part of learning and receiving helpful corrections.
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