toefl independent essay, day 12
Could you please correct my essay?
Some people like to travel with a companion. Other people prefer to travel alone. Which do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your choice.
Essay
It is critically important to make a trip in a way according to your personal preferences for enjoying the process. I am of the opinion that travelling with a partner is much preferable than travelling on your own. I will explore why I feel this way in the following essay.
To begin with, it is easier to solve unexpected problems together, when you can share your opinion with your companion and discuss probable solutions. People with different backgrounds usually have different opinions on the same situation. My own experience is a compelling example of it. Two years ago, I was going with my friends from Moscow to Minsk by bus, when a hotel that was meant to be our housing to sleep that night suddenly cancelled the reservation. First reaction was a shock and fear of sleeping on a street, because we could not afford to pay for a new hotel room. Nevertheless, my friend had a clear mind and quickly made a phone call to his acquaintance who was living in Minsk. As a result, we saved our money and slept in his house, due to his understanding and hospitality. This example demonstrates how the trip could be spoilt without the help of your companion.
Second, it is always better to have conversations during the trip and not to feel lonely. You can always discuss a local culture or national cuisine and improve your knowledge with facts that your partner are sharing with you. For instance, once I had a brilliant trip to Milan with skiing and shopping. But this trip would not have been such intense and informative, if I had not had my Italian cousin with me. We spent hours walking in a historical centre of the town and this stroll was fulfilled with a plethora of facts about the government and culture of a medieval Italy. As I found learning history with textbooks a bit challenging, it is always a pleasure for me to learn about it in person. Now I want to pay more attention to the Italian history and come back in Milan in a year.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that travelling with another person is much better that have a trip all alone. This is because of help in difficult situations and because of entertainment during the trip.
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toefl independent essay, day 12
Could you please correct my essay?
Some people like to travel with a companion. Other people prefer to travel alone. Which do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your choice.
Essay
It is critically important to plan a trip according to your personal preferences to enjoy the process. I am of the opinion that travelling with a partner is much preferable than travelling on my own. I will explore why I feel this way in the following essay.
To begin with, it is easier to solve unexpected problems together, when you can share your opinion with your companion and discuss probable solutions. People with different backgrounds usually have different opinions on the same situation. My own experience is a compelling example of it. Two years ago, I was going with my friends from Moscow to Minsk by bus, when a hotel that was meant to be our accommodation that night suddenly cancelled the reservation. First reaction was a shock and fear of sleeping on the street, because we could not afford to pay for a new hotel room. Nevertheless, my friend had a clear mind and quickly made a phone call to his acquaintance who was living in Minsk. As a result, we saved our money and slept in his house, thanks to his understanding and hospitality. This example demonstrates how the trip could be spoilt without the help of your companion.
Second, it is always better to have conversations during the trip and not to feel lonely. You can always discuss a local culture or national cuisine and improve your knowledge with facts that your partner are sharing with you. For instance, once I had a brilliant trip to Milan with skiing and shopping. But this trip would not have been as intense and informative, had I not had my Italian cousin with me. We spent hours walking in a historical centre of the town and this stroll was filled with a plethora of facts about the government and culture of medieval Italy. As I found learning history with textbooks a bit challenging, it is always a pleasure for me to learn about it in person. Now I want to pay more attention to the Italian history and come back to Milan in a year.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that travelling with another person is much better to have a trip alone. This is because I highly appreciate assistance in difficult situations entertainment during the trip.
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