개인적인 생각으로 글 전체를 이렇게 쓴다면 더 자연스러울 것 같아요. 개인적인 personal 생각 thought, opinion 개인적인 생각으로 in my personal opinion 글 writing 전체 whole 이렇게 this way ㄴ다면 if (the subject) do 더 more ㄹ 것 같다 It seems that... / it will probably... When [-ㅂ다]-shaped adjective verbs like 자연스럽다, 귀엽다, 차갑다 are used as an adjective, the 'ㅂ' syllable becomes 우. 자연스럽다 ⇒ 자연스러우 + ㄹ 것 같다 = 자연스러울 것 같다.

basic form: 자연스럽다 / is an adjective with an irregular conjugation(ㅂ불규칙 활용). So you have to put away 받침 'ㅂ' when you speak. * 자연스러+울 / 울 is 어미, the ending of a word, means 'like~', 'as~' and expectation, future... * 것 is 의존명사, a bound noun, that is no meaning itself. 것: thing -> 자연스러+운 be natural / 자연스러+울 things likely to be natural More examples would help your understanding * 괴롭다 be painful / 괴로운 오후 (I had a miserable afternoon) / 그는 지금쯤 무척 '괴로울' 거야 He must be distressed by now. * 외롭다 be lonely / 외로운 a lonely wanderer 그 아이는 틀림없이 '외로울' 것이다 The boy must be lonely. or The boy is lonely, I am sure. ** In an irregular conjugation, the function of ~울 is same as, or similar to the follows; be hard 힘들다 / 힘들 것 같아 (I think) it'll be hard be fast 빠르다 / 빠를 것 같아 be fun 재미있다 / 재미있을 것 같아 >> ~스럽다 be; be like; seem; suggest 변덕스럽다 be capricious / 변덕(명사)+스럽다 사랑스럽다 be lovely <- 사랑하다 걱정스럽다 be anxious <- 걱정하다

I think, you can translate this sentence like this: "In my opinion, if you write the whole story like this, it would be more natual." "자연스러울 것 같다" means that "it would be natural" "더 자연스러울 것 같다" -> " It would be more natual" I hope it could help you^^

Just on the 자연스러울 것 같아요 part... 자연스럽다 means 'be natural'. 자연스러울 is its future form before a noun. In this case, the noun is 것 'thing' (or rather 'that'). 같다 means 'look like'. Note: verbs in 럽다 change their 'p' to 'u' before some suffixes.