The excessive use of the internet
Good day everyone!
Today, I was working on my writing again and I was practicing with an exercise from my IELTS book.
Please. let me know you suggestions about my writing (this area is my weakness, I guess) so I wil appreciate your support.
Thank you in advance :D
The popularity of people using the internet has created a vastly of consequences in the psychological and psysical health of humans. In my opinión the solutions with a preventive approach for avoiding being a victim of these drawbacks could be beneficial.
Navigating over the web could be useful for a lot of purposes as studying a language or comunicating with people who are far away of us. Nevertheless, the excessive use of the internet could have effects on psychological health. For instance, there are people who feel less interested in going out with friends because it is more easier ti stay in house and watch a movie. Thie behaviour could lead to develop mental illness as Depression. A posible solution could be to make a daily plan of our activities which includes the time we should be using it. This has possitive effects because we put clear limits to our actions.
Another disadvantage is related to psychical effects which some of the most common are vision problems and backache. For example, when I used my gadgates for 2 hours without a break, my eyes starts tearing and this makes me need to stop it. Also, my muscles are too tense due to be in the same position for prolonged periods of time. An effective strategy is to exercised daily because with this simple habit people stay away from their cellphone at least for 30 minutes.
In conlusion, it is a fact that the internet is exceedingly fashionable to use nowdays. However, an excessive use of it could make psychological and psysical problems on people. But Preventive measures could be efficient to avoiding them.
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The excessive use of the internet
Good day everyone!Today, I was working on my writing again and I was practicing with an exercise from my IELTS book.
Please. let me know your suggestions about my writing (this area is my weakness, I guess) so I wil appreciate your support.
Thank you in advance :D
The popularity of people using the internet has created a vastly amount of consequences in the psychological and physical health of humans. In my opinion, the solutions with a preventive approach for avoiding being a victim of these drawbacks could be beneficial.
Navigating over the web could be useful for a lot of purposes such as studying a language or communicating with people who are far away from us. Nevertheless, the excessive use of the internet could have effects on psychological health. For instance, there are people who feel less interested in going out with friends because it is more easier to stay in the house and watch a movie. Thie behaviour could lead to the development of (or just 'could lead to mental illness') a mental illness, such as depression. A posible solution could be to make a daily plan of our activities which includes the time we should be using it. This has possitive effects because we put clear limits to our actions.
Another disadvantage is related to psychical effects, which some of the most common of which (or 'of which some of the most common are...) are vision problems and backache. For example, when I used my gadgates for 2 hours without a break, my eyes starts tearing to water and this makes me need to stop it. Also, my muscles are can become (or 'become') too tense due to being in the same position for prolonged periods of time. An effective strategy is to exercised daily because with this simple habit people stay away from their cellphone at least for 30 minutes.
In conlusion, it is a fact that the internet is exceedingly fashionable to use nowadays. However, an excessive use of it could make cause psychological and physical problems in people. But Preventive measures could be efficient to effective in helping to avoiding them.
You have made some spelling errors which I haven't corrected as I think spellchecker can do that but great writing! Good luck in your studies! :)
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The excessive use of the internet
Good day everyone!Today, I was working on my writing again and I was practising with an exercise from my IELTS book.
Please let me know your suggestions about my writing. This area is my weakness, I guess, so I will appreciate your support.
Thank you in advance :D
The popularity of people using the internet has created a variety of consequences in the psychological and physical health of humans. In my opinion, the solutions with a preventive approach to avoid being a victim of these drawbacks could be beneficial.
Navigating over the web can be useful for a lot of purposes such as studying a language or communicating with people who are far away from us. Nevertheless, the excessive use of the internet could have effects on psychological health. For instance, there are people who feel less interested in going out with friends because it is easier to stay at home and watch a movie. This behaviour could lead to the development of mental illnesses such as depression. A possible solution could be to make a daily plan for our activities which includes the time we should spend using the internet. This has positive effects because can we put clear limits on our actions.
Another disadvantage is related to physical effects of which some of the most common are vision problems and backaches. For example, when I used my gadgets for 2 hours without a break, my eyes start tearing and this makes me need to stop. Also, my muscles are too tense due to being in the same position for prolonged periods of time. An effective strategy is to exercise daily because with this simple habit people stay away from their cellphone at least for 30 minutes.
In conclusion, it is a fact that the internet is exceedingly fashionable to use nowadays. However, excessive use of it could create psychological and physical problems for people but preventive measures could be effective for avoiding them.
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The popularity of people using the internet has created a vastly vast array of consequences in on the psychological and physical health of humans. In my opinion, the solutions with a preventive approach for avoiding being to avoid becoming a victim of these drawbacks could be beneficial.
Navigating over the web could can be useful for a lot of purposes, such as studying a language or communicating with people who are far away of from us. Nevertheless, the excessive use of the internet could have negative effects on psychological health. For instance, there are people who feel less interested in going out with friends because it is more easier to stay in the house and watch a movie. This behaviour could lead to the development of mental illnesses, such as depression. A possible solution could be to make a daily plan of our activities which includes the time we should be using it the internet ((we say 'the internet' instead of 'it' here because the focus of the previous sentence was mental illness, not the main topic)). This has positive effects because we put clear limits to on our actions.
Another disadvantage is related to psychical physical effects, which some some of which of the most common are vision problems and backache. For example, when I used use my gadgates gadgets for 2 hours without a break, my eyes starts tearing and this makes me need to stop it. Also, my muscles are become too tense due to being in the same position for prolonged periods of time. An effective strategy to avoid these physical problems is to exercised exercise daily because with this simple habit people stay away from their cellphone at least for 30 minutes.
In conclusion, it is a fact that the internet is exceedingly fashionable to use nowadays. However, an excessive use of it could make create psychological and physical problems on for people. But preventive measures could be efficient to in helping people avoid them.
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