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Day 2 - 30 Day Creative Writing Challenge Day 2 Think of three people in your life. Give your character the hair and laugh of person 1, the face and bedroom of person 2, and the wardrobe and mannerisms of person 3. This is your new protagonist. Feel free to give him or her any other characteristics you'd like. Give us an idea of who your character is by describing only the first 60 seconds of the character's day. Here we go: "Why it's always so hard to wake up in the morning? Specially when you're a night owl and works, thinks and do everything better at night. Whatever, just one more normal day. Man, the days are passing by so fast. When I was a child one hour seemed like forever, now I barely notice it. I hate checking my phone up as soon as I wake up, screens really bothers my eyes, specially in the morning. I should just wash my face and start the day. As I go to the restroom I feel the weight over my legs becoming harder to bear each day. Looking into the mirror I see this long black hair that doesn't seem to fit anymore. At least my laugh, which I'm known for, and my good mood are just the same. After brushing my teeth, with a smile on my face I think of me short haired. Weird. I throw some water on my face, dry it up and go back to my room. It's a complete mess. God, I have organized everything and cleaned it up couple days ago. How can I make such a mess in a so short amount of time? Maybe the problem is my wardrobe. It has so many clothes that I never wear. Every time I have to pick something up trying to combine pieces I throw them over my bed, chair or hang on the doors all the 'misfits'. Just like a hurricane. And then, one more normal day begins..." I appreciate your corrections. =)

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Day 2 - 30 Day Creative Writing Challenge

Day 2
Think of three people in your life. Give your character the hair and laugh of person 1, the face and bedroom of person 2, and the wardrobe and mannerisms of person 3. This is your new protagonist. Feel free to give him or her any other characteristics you'd like. Give us an idea of who your character is by describing only the first 60 seconds of the character's day.

Here we go:


"Why it's  is it always so hard to wake up in the morning?  Specially  Especially when you're a night owl and  who works, thinks, and does everything better at night.  Whatever, just one more(('another' would sound more natural here.)) normal day.  Man, the days are passing by so fast.  When I was a child one hour seemed like forever, now I barely notice it.

I hate checking my phone up  as soon as I wake up.  Screens really bothers  bother my eyes, specially  especially in the morning.  I should just wash my face and start the day.  As I go to the restroom((to sound more natural, use bathroom at home, restroom for public places)) I feel the weight over my legs  on my shoulders becoming harder to bear each day.  Looking into the mirror, I see this long black hair that doesn't seem to fit anymore.  At least my laugh, which I'm known for, and my good mood are just the same.  After brushing my teeth, with a smile on my face I think of me  myself short-haired.  Weird.   I throw some water on my face, dry it up, and go back to my room.

It's a complete mess.  God, I have  organized everything and cleaned it up a couple of days ago.  How can I make such a mess in a so  such a short amount of time?  Maybe the problem is my wardrobe.  It has so many clothes that I never wear.  Every time I have to  pick something up  out, trying to combine pieces, I throw them over my bed, chair, or hang them on the doors; all the 'misfits'.  Just like a hurricane.

And then, one more normal day begins..."


*hope that was helpful :) this is a cool exercise 

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Day 2 - 30 Day Creative Writing Challenge

Day 2
Think of three people in your life. Give your character the hair and laugh of person 1, the face and bedroom of person 2, and the wardrobe and mannerisms of person 3. This is your new protagonist. Feel free to give him or her any other characteristics you'd like. Give us an idea of who your character is by describing only the first 60 seconds of the character's day.

Here we go:
"Why it's is it always so hard to wake up in the morning? Especially when you're a night owl and work, think, and do everything better at night. Whatever, just one more normal day (a native speaker would say "ugh, it's just another day"). Man, the days are passing by so fast. When I was a child one hour seemed like forever, now I barely notice it.

I hate checking my phone up as soon as I wake up, screens really bother my eyes, especially in the morning. I should just wash my face and start the day. As I go to the restroom I feel the weight over my legs becoming harder to bear each day. Looking into the mirror I see this long black hair that doesn't seem to fit anymore. At least my laugh, which I'm known for, and my good mood are just the same. After brushing my teeth, with a smile on my face, I think of my short hair. Weird. I throw some water on my face, dry it up off and go back to my room.

It's a complete mess. God, I have organized everything and cleaned it up a couple of days ago. How can I make such a mess in a so short amount of time? Maybe the problem is my wardrobe. It has so many clothes that I never wear. Every time I have to pick something up, trying to combine pieces, I throw them over my bed, chair, or hang all the misfits on the door. on the doors all the 'misfits'. Just It looks like a hurricane.

And then, one more normal  another day begins..." (If they are speaking about work, another common phrase would be "another day, another dollar.")

I appreciate your corrections. =)


NOTE: You did really well, most of the corrections were plural that should have been singular or a misplaced article. Overall, great job!

Just to clarify "especially" is the correct way to spell it, but many people pronounce it "specially".

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