First notebook entry: Introducing myself

Hi, I'm a Korean woman. I've been living in Korea for 33years now. I'm learnig English because I have a dream. A dream that I become a internet translater working at home. My 24hours are always handfull. with house chores, cleaning, cooking, etc... still, I never let go of my dream. and I love my country -precisely Korean language- so much that I want to share it with people all over the world. Thank you for listening.

Hi. I am a Korean woman. I have lived in Korea for all of my thirty three years. I am learning English because I have the dream of being an Internet translator working from home. My dasy are always busy with housework such as cleaning and cooking. Still, I will never let go of my dream. I love the Korean language so much that I want to share it with people akk over the world.Thank you for reading my introduction.

First notebook entry: Introducing myself

Hi, I'm a Korean woman. I've been living in Korea for 33 years now. I'm learning English because I have a dream. My dream is to I become a internet translater who works from home. My days are always really busy with household chores, cleaning, cooking, etc... still, I'll never let go of my dream. and I love Korea, I mean the Korean language), so much that I want to share it with people from all over the world. Thanks for reading this.

안녕하세요!  환영합니다!  한국에 대해 하고 한국어를 더  배우고 싶어요.  모멘트가 있으면, 제 글을 확인해주시겠어요?

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그건대문자로써야합니다.   단어의순서, 단어의선택이나철자를고쳤습니다.             이건더자연스럽거나더일반적인방법의표현입니다.   맞은구두점과띄어쓰기를사용해주세요.   제코멘트나  제안입니다.     

열쇠색을낸시4366으로만들었습니다. 도움이됐으면좋겠습니다. 

First notebook entry: Introducing myself

Hi, I'm a Korean woman. I've been living in Korea for 33 years now. I'm I am 1 learning English because I have a dream - a dream that I can become an internet translater working at home. My 24 hours days2 are always handfull. filled with housework chores, cleaning, cooking, etc... Still, I never let go of my dream. and I love my country-precisely Korean language-3 its culture and language.  So much that I want to share it with people all over the world. Thank you for listening.

1.  Don't use I've, I'm all the contraction forms in formal essays.  They are for writing dialog etc.

2.  Then when do you have the time to rest, sleep etc?  No need to exaggerate until this much. In using, "day" you are still exaggerating but that is understandable.

3.  It makes no sense to throw in your love of the Korean language by enclosing them in dashes.