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今天天气这么不好 在德国里冬天几乎结束。不再有雪,可是天气还很冷。我喜欢冬天,但是我不喜欢没有雪的冷天气。今天天气没有雪,可是有下雨和强的风。我不恨喜欢这样的天气。但是这根本是大自然的流程所以我得同意。

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Notizen: 

1. In German sentences, the tense is clear at a glance. But Chinese is not like this.

⑴ So you better add time at the beginning of the sentence, such as: 现在(= now),现在( =today),晚上(= evening),将来( =future).

⑵ Or you can use an 助动词(= auxiliary verb) with a meaning of time: e.g. 会 = will (means: it's possible to achieve), sentence: 她不会出席(= she will not attend) ;

⑶ also, 副词(= adverbs)with a meaning of time can be used: e.g. 将 = 将要 = 快要 = 就要 = will (means: soon) , Sentence: 天将下雨 (= It will rain).

2. If you need to add the word "天气(das Wetter)" in Chinese sentences, it is generally the only saying: 今天天气真不好= 今天天气真差 / 真糟糕 ; if you want to say wind(=  风) / snow(=  雪)/ cloud(= 云), etc., you don't need to add "天气(das Wetter)".

3. I know why you often use "和" to express two things which happen at the same time. Because "和" &“而且/并且” in German both are "und/sowie". In fact, there is a difference. Let me talk about common situations.

⑴ "和" , it can only be two noun before and after; 

⑵ “而且/并且” , its front and back are juxtaposed sentences(并列的句子).

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今天天气这么不好

在德国里冬天几乎快要/就要/将 1结束了。(现在 1)已经不再有雪了,可是天气还(是)很冷。我喜欢冬天,但是我不喜欢没有雪的冷天气。今天天气 2 没有雪,可是有下雨和而且/ 并且 3   还刮着大风 4 (oder  风还很大 4)。我很 5 不恨喜欢这样的天气。但是这根本就是大自然的流程变化过程 6 ,所以我得同意认同 7 (它)。

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Notizen: 

4. "Es regnet so stark. / Es weht ein starker Wind.”  In German, stark describes rain and wind, etc. as common, but direct translation into Chinese is 强(= strong), which is not in line with Chinese expression habits. It should be translated into 大.

⑴ Es regnet so stark.                 German Style translation:  雨下得很强。  Correct translation:  雨下得很大。

⑵ Es weht ein starker Wind.     German Style translation:  强风在吹。      Correct translation:  正在刮大风。

5. Adverbs which present degree「such as 很(=very), 比较(= representing a certain degree), 挺(= quite), 蛮(= pretty), etc」placed before verbs「such as (不)喜欢=(not) like, 排斥=reject, 讨厌/厌恨=hate, etc」.

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Notizen: 

6. 大自然的流程?Der Prozess der Natur??? What do you want to express?

Chinese never say this. “大自然的变化过程” maybe is better.

7. “Er zustimmt dieser Standpunkt nicht.” It's translated into Chinese: 他不认同这个观点  oder  他不同意这个观点   both are correct. “认同“ and “同意 “ have the same meaning in German: zustimmen. But there are subtle differences in Chinese. 

"同意" is used in a wider range. "同意" can be used in places where "认同" is used, and "认同" cannot be used in places where "同意" is used.

“认同“is more rational than "同意", an objective view or position of something. And "同意" is more about feeling things.


  修改版:

在德国里冬天快要结束了。现在已经不再有雪了,可是天气还是很冷。我喜欢冬天,但是我不喜欢没有雪的冷天气。今天没有雪,可是有下雨而且/并且还刮着大风(oder风还很大)。我很不喜欢这样的天气。但是这根本就是大自然的变化过程,所以我得认同它。


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今天天气这么不好

在德国,冬天几乎快要结束了。这里不再有雪,可是天气还是很冷。我喜欢冬天,特别是下了雪的冬天,但是今天就没有下雪,只是刮起了很强的风并伴着雨。我非常不喜欢(或者说很讨厌)这样的天气。但是上天安排的事情,谁能够去改变呢,我只能顺着天意而为。

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