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Diary #6 I talked about my plan with my friend today, but I could not say what in my mind precisely. So I'd like to reconstruct my goal here. I actually don't have such a huge dream or ambition. I want to work for a famous Japanese multi-national company which is handling Japanese foods as a white collar, and spread Japanese food all over the world, especially Asian countries. Honestly, I wanted to do something related to skiing or winter mountain, but few professional people can make money with such a job. I have to support my family, and I want to have kids. So I quit this dream.

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Diary #6

I talked about my plans for the future with my friend today, but I could not precisely say what was on my mind at that time. Thus, I would like to reconstruct that conversation here now.

“I actually do not have such huge dreams or ambitions. I want to work in a white-collar job for a famous Japanese multi-national company, one that handles Japanese foods, and help it to spread Japanese food all over the world, but especially, into neighboring Asian countries.” 

Honestly, I wanted to do something related to skiing or other winter mountain sports, but few people can make enough money doing such a job as a profession. I have to help support my parents, and someday, I want to get married and to have kids, so I quit that dream.

Hi, Daisaku. Good job! The changes that I made were to allow your sentences to sound more natural to my native ears, for clarity your ideas, and for ease of readings. I hope that this helps you. J. 

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Diary #6

I talked about my plan with my friend today, but I could not say what was on my mind precisely. So I'd like to try again here.

*I think you're specifically talking about career/future plans which might be good to specify since just saying "plan" usually means your plan for today or tomorrow or in the near future. e.g. my plan today is to finish my homework.

I actually don't have such a huge dream or ambition. I want to work for a famous Japanese multi-national company which is handling Japanese foods as a white collar and spread Japanese food all over the world, especially to Asian countries.

This is a bit wordy. Would it work if you just say "Japanese multinational food company" or even "food production company"? 


Honestly, I wanted to do something related to skiing or winter mountain, but few professional people can make money with such a job. I have to support my family, and I want to have kids. So I gave up on this dream.

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