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Your basic English is good and well written. Therefore just correcting your grammar and structure do not do justice in pushing you up another notch. I am correcting it to show you in gaining that level.
How do I handle stress and pressure? Handling Stress & Pressure.
Nowadays, our jobs and life styles can easily cause a lot of great stress to people. there’s no doubt This generation is too pressed goal oriented to achieve their goals and grow and thus we become too a competitive and too proactive personality. But this has a very This is a high price that we have to pay. It’s well known 1is a fact that stress is the main causes of a lot of diseases many ailments 2, both mentally and physically. , that’s why Recently, there’s is great a big concern of in getting a well balanced in life, and 3people is wanted to have ways to handle stress and pressure. We need to find new ways to handle stress and pressure. To live a life, not striving in one. 4
By my side, 5 Come on aboard with me to achieve a better quaility of life. One of the things I like to recommend to achieve this is this: keep contact to Reconnect with nature. In my Whenever I have free time, I like to get away from those things that generate would get away from all stress causing situations. , I like to get on my bike and have a ride as far away from the city as I can; and leaving all its jams, pollution, crowded places, and other stressed out people behind. It’s is necessary to change from time to time that unhealthy environment for head out to a relaxing place that is one full of trees, birds, rivers, waterfalls and animals. We should be grateful that we can find those that these places are so easily within our reach. Also, stress can simply fade out by exercising, Stress can also be rid of easily through exercise! Our body is a complex machine designed to keep moving, be in motion. Effortless actions just Simple exercises, like walking can bring great benefits is highly beneficial to our body.
Thanks to all anyone who spentds the time to reading and correcting this.
Great advice and hope to read more of your essays.
1. You are writing formally, so don't use any contractions as in speech. Spell out in full. Must not make your writing looks shabby. You would dressed yourself "impeccably" when going to parties, don't you?
2. Check your dictionary for the difference in meaning of "ailment" and "disease".
3. Don't put commas in front of "and" and "but". They are superfluous and unneeded.
4. This sentence is weak. Hence my added words.
5. By itself, this doesn't make much sense. Maybe you are not able to express your feeling. So I am guessing your sentiment.
How do I handle stress and pressure?
Nowadays, our jobs and life styles can easily cause a lot of stress to people, there’s no doubt this generation is too pressed to achieve their goals and grow a competitive and proactive personality. But (Don't start a sentence with "and" "but" or "or") This has a very high price to pay. It’s well known that stress is the main cause of a lot of diseases, both mental and physical, that’s why recently there’s a big concern of getting a balance in life, and people is wanted to have ways to handle stress and pressure.
By my side (what do you mean by this? It is not necessary in the sentence), one of the things I recommend to achieve (achieve what?) this is: keep contact to(this makes sense, but you would want to say "Spend time with nature") nature. In my free time I like to get away from those things that generate stress, I like to get my bike and have a ride far away from city and its jams (traffic is a better word choice), pollution, crowded places, and other stressed people. It’s necessary to change from time to time that unhealthy environment for one full of trees, birds, rivers, waterfalls and animals. We should be grateful that we can find those easily. Also, stress can simply fade out by exercising, our body is a complex machine designed to keep moving, effortless actions just like walking can bring great benefits to our body.
Thanks anyone who spends time to read and correct this.
This is fantastic!!! Just one or two gramatical errors, and a few word choice problems, but this is REALLY good!! :D
Nowadays our job and lifestyle can easily cause a lot of stress. There is no doubt this generation is too dedicated to achieve their goals, become competitive, and having a proactive personality. But this will have a very high price to pay. We all know that stress is the main cause of diseases, both mental and physical. Recently there is a big concern of getting a balance lifestyle. People wanted to know and observe ways to properly handle stress and pressure.
On my case, one thing I recommend to achieve this is to keep contact with nature. During my free time I wanted to avoid things that generate stress. I take my bike and ride far from city to avoid traffic, pollution, crowd, and other stressful people. It’s necessary to move from time to time away from that unhealthy environment to a place full of trees, birds, rivers, waterfalls and animals. We should be grateful that we have these accessible.
Also, stress can simply deteriorate by exercising. Our body is a complex machine designed to keep moving. Effortless actions just like walking can bring great benefits to our body.
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