I wanted to say something to you too :)  I think you need to write simply.  If you are trying to write in a higher level that is beyond your command of the language you will fall.  I hate to tell you this but this is the truth.  You are the first one that I gave up in the middle of correction because I cannot understand what you are trying to convey because of wrong spellings, using big words that I don't even know and words from other languages such as Sanskrit.  You are in luck as I know some Chinese.  So if you would like to have your essay corrected, please write in Chinese and after each line, translate it into English.  I can only correct what I know and how I perceive you in trying to express things.

I hope you will understand.  I am a blunt person and I am willing to help you but you must help yourself first.  People will just ignore you because they are afraid in offending you.  In the end, it will be your loss as you learn nothing.

You need to give a translation in the language you are writing.  Not everyone knows Chinese.  So I am translating it for you.  At least this shows that I am trying to help you to improve your English.  I hope that you understand that this is 忠言逆耳 and not trying to put you down.  Everyone has to start from somewhere :)

http://www.italki.com/knowledge/page/Mechanics%20Of%20The%20English%20Language.htm

Just wanted to say something...

I don`t know what`s come came over me but I just wanted to pour out some words for my messy thoughts.

Sometimes, as now,I will think the valuation need to reevaluate of things that I am doing constantly.ceaselessly.  I don`t know if all these are worthy are worth my while. if I am doing the right do things right for my life, my tomorrow,if I would be would I be in deep remorse for my days to come... in sight...

All this just because I was bearing the autopunition??? of my passing days.I just...just want to be anapatrapya of my tomorrow.  No more tears, no more repentance ....
But I know I shouldn`t be so entangled with my life. Maybe, what I really need is to find some time for myself and look on the bright part side of tomorrow...
I know I must make myself know that I have my dear parents, my lovely good friends who love me very muchdearly.，So I have no reason to be frustrated!

Now,after the summer holiday, I waved a farewell for my yesr of a freshman in my university,what I should face is a new academic year. I decide to concentrate on my studies, learning Japanese , following closely of hotspots, and work hard in student union...Leastways,I have great potentialities, don`t I ? HaHa....：）
So, I know, I must do more than others expect I to do and do it in pains...
Maybe,I won`t often get on italki from now on,but if somebody want to study with each other or just want to make friends with me,I will be willing to learn more about language , collogue our lives and share happiness&sadness together with you...My MSN：[email protected] Also,you can just neglect it...

Forgive me for my messy words.

PS：I want to add on a few words which I ever so like. They are from a poem by of a poet named Wang Guozhen.The title is .

我不去想是否能够成功  Go not and know not if I succeed.
既然选择了远方            As I had chosen this long journey,
便只顾风雨兼程            Then let the wind and rain be my hardships.
我不去想能否赢得爱情 Go not and know not if I win love.

既然钟情于玫瑰            As I had chosen this rose to love,
就勇敢地吐露真诚        Then be brave to unveil my honesty.
我不去想身后会不会袭来寒风冷雨 Go not and know not cold winds and freezing rain.
既然目标是地平线        As my aim is at the horizon,
留给世界的只能是背影 All I can leave behind this world is my shadow.
我不去想未来是平坦还是泥泞 Go not and know not my future is a bore or be tumultuous.
只要热爱生命                          Only if you cherish life dearly,
一切，都在意料之中               Expect everything to be unexpected.