First notebook entry: Introducing myself

My name is Yukari, I'm a student in at the Osaka University. I am curious. I and want to experiment a lot of with many things. I study English because I want to talk with people in around the world. I think Also I can get gain more knowledge from it talking with people who are in various situation and making friends along the way.

Also I want to make friends to get along with me.
I want like to try to talking about my hobby in English so that I can improve my English skills And I want to improve my English ability to learn from my friends and teach them my friends Japanese.

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First notebook entry: Introducing myself

My name is Yukari.
I'm a student at Osaka University.
I am curious. I want to experient a lot of things.
I am studying English because I want to talk with different people around the world.
I think I can get more knowledge by talking with people who are in various situations (or from various backgrounds).
Also I want to make new friends who I can get along with.
I want to try to talk about my hobbies in English and I want to improve my English ability to learn from my friends while teaching them Japanese.

よくできました。I only fixed a few things. Most of it I changed to sound a little more like a native speaker but they did not need to be changed for meaning. 

First notebook entry: Introducing myself

My name is Yukari.
I'm a student at Osaka University.
I am curious. I want to experiment with a lot of things.
I study English because I want to talk with people of the world.
I think I can get more knowledge by talking with people who are in various situations.
Also I want to make friends that get along with me.
I want to try to talk about my hobby in English.
And I want to improve my English ability to learn from my friends and teach them Japanese.

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Guide: Red=訂正|Blue=推敲|Yellow=わかり難い|Green=意見

よくできました！You did good. Prepositions can be difficult but keep at it!! :)