What does it look like to have a dog?
When we were children we always asked our parents to get a dog. But our dream came true only when we became adults.
To keep a dog it's like to have a baby - it takes all your time and all your thoughts - how to feed, how to raise, how to trim, how to heal. It turns to your family member, it needs your love and care. You have to play with it every day! To the exchange, it gives you happiness and joy. It is the only creature on the Earth who always happy to see you - at any day of the week, at any hour, even at night. It always forgives you for your rudeness, your silence or nudges. It's naive and sometimes you are surprised how much it trusts you.
Sometimes you watch in its big devoted eyes and can't understand what does it need? What do you want? I wish my dog would be able to speak.
IN general, to keep a dog it's a great happiness but great responsibility.
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What does it look like to have a dog?(I recommend: "What is it like to have a dog?" or "What does life with a dog look like?")
When we were children we always(change to: "often" or "commonly," "always" is figurative language known as hyperbole, it is an exaggerated way of speaking.) asked our parents to get a dog. But (Avoid starting sentences with conjunctions: "But" "And" "Yet")our dream came true only (You have "only" here and "But" at the start of the sentence. You only need one. "Our dream came true only when we became adults.") when we became adults.To keep a dog it's like to have a baby(is like having a baby), it takes all of your time and all of your thoughts(recommend: "thought" singular) - (Dashes like this are very uncommon in both formal and informal writing. Best used as a last resort to maintain the precise wording of your sentence. Often used by authors in creative writing.)how to feed it, how to raise it, how to trim it, how to heal it. It turns into your family member and, it needs your love and care. You have to play with it every day! In exchange, it gives you happiness and joy. It is the only creature on the Earth who is always happy to see you at any day of the week, at any hour and, even at night. It always forgives you for your rudeness, your silence or nudges(I don't think nudge is the word you are looking for. A nudge is not something that usually requires forgiveness. Recommend: "annoying habits"). It's naive and sometimes you are surprised by how much it trusts you.
Sometimes you watch (recommend "look" or "see") into its big devoted eyes and can't understand what does it need? What do you want? I wish my dog was be able to speak.
In general, to keep (recommend: "own" or "have" or "keep a dog as a pet") a dog is a great source of happiness but also a great responsibility.
What you say is very true! I usually recommend taking care of a friend's dog for a week or two before getting one's own. Your points come across clearly. You change the point of view a few times throughout the paragraph. Third person, second person, and then you refer to the dog in second person. For an informal piece this is OK, but not for formal writing. Let me know if you have any questions about the corrections.
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What does it look like to have a dog?
When we were children we always asked our parents if we could get a dog, but our dream only came true when we became adults.To keep a dog is like to having a baby; it takes all your time and all your thoughts - how to feed it, how to raise it, how to trim (What do you mean here? Trim their fur, perhaps?), and how to heal it when it's ill. It turns to a family member because it needs your love and care. You have to play with it every day! On the other hand/contrary, it gives you happiness and joy. It is the only creature on the Earth that's always happy to see you at any day of the week and at any hour, even at night. It always forgives you for your rudeness, your silence or nudges. It's naive and sometimes you are surprised by how much it trusts you.
Sometimes you look into its big devoted eyes and can't understand what does it needs. What does it want? I wish my dog were able to speak.
In general, to have a dog is a great happiness but also a great responsibility.
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What does it look like to have a dog?
When we were children we always asked our parents to get a dog. But our dream came true only when we became adults.To keep Having a dog it's is like to have having a baby - it takes all your time and all your thoughts - how to feed it, how to raise it, how to trim groom it, how to heal it. It turns to your becomes a member of the family member and it needs your love and care. You have to play with it every day! To the In exchange, it gives you happiness and joy. It is the only creature on the Earth who that is always happy to see you - at any day of the week, at any hour, even at night. It always forgives you for your rudeness, your silence or nudges (I'm not sure what you mean here, but a nudge is a gentle prod or light touch). It's naive innocent and sometimes you are surprised by how much it trusts you.
Sometimes you watch in look into its big devoted eyes and can't understand what does it needs. "What do you want?" you ask. I wish my dog would be were able to speak.
In general, having a dog brings great happiness but also great responsibility.
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