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Kim Chang
Writting a letter - give a suggestion Thanks for watching my notebook. I am practice writing a letter now! I really appreciate you help me to correct. Any suggestion is the good suggestion for me. The letter I wrote is : _________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Dear Mary I heard that you have asked to organize our company’s trip this year. I have a good idea and want to share with you. How about we go to a farm? I have been to a farm named AA in the north of Toronto that lets people pick and eat fruit or vegetable on the farm. Furthermore, the farm also can have a BBQ there, they have space to let people eating meal and BBQ. It does not vary far for us, only 1 hour drive, as a result, we can take a bus or drive our own car. There are several reasons why I think this would be great. First, everyone loves to eat. We can eat fresh fruit and vegetable there and make delicious BBQ by ourselves. And second, the farm is beautiful, we can have lunch together and enjoy the nature at the same time. I think is good for us to have a comfortable space talk without pressure. If you want further information, please do not hesitate to contact me. Regards, Fin

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Writting a letter - give a suggestion

Thanks for watching reading my notebook. I am practicing writing a letter now!
I really appreciate you helping me to correct it. Any suggestion is the a good suggestion for me.

The letter I wrote is :
_________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________

Dear Mary

I heard that you have asked to organize our company’s trip this year. I have a good idea and want to share it with you.

How about we go to a farm? I have been to a farm named AA in the north of Toronto that lets people pick and eat fruits or vegetables on the farm. Furthermore, the farm also can have host a BBQ there, they have space to let people eating meals and BBQ. It does is not very far for us. It is only 1 hour's drive, as a result, so we can take a bus or drive our own cars.

There are several reasons why I think this would be great. First, everyone loves to eat. We can eat fresh fruits and vegetables there and make delicious BBQ by ourselves. And second, the farm is beautiful, we can have lunch together and enjoy the nature at the same time. I think it is good for us to have a comfortable space to talk without pressure.

If you want further information, please do not hesitate to contact me.

Regards,
Fin


Very well written!

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Nice letter! I agree with Todd's corrections, but you should also know that the more common way to say 'make delicious BBQ by ourselves' is 'have a delicious BBQ by ourselves.'

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