please help me with muy presentation
any correction and mistakes please tell me
I'd like to talk about my favorite movie it's (fargo)
It talks about someone who works for an automobile company and he is the general manager , he is married to a beautiful wife and he has an 8 year old child , he prepared his feasibility study about his dream business so he went to his father in law and presented it in the front of him but he refused and he told him money doesn't grow on trees you have to depend on yourself and to take responsibility yourself. he got a deal with 2 criminals and they agreed there will no be blood in this plan .
they burgled the house , kidnapped his wife and they hurt the child . they drove their car heading to the sfe place once the sheriff stopped the car and he charged them with reckless driving , there were quiet insane , the weirdo killed the sheriff . a car passed right them and saw the murder , the 2 criminals followed them and they killed them too.
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Please help me with my presentation. If there are any corrections to be made and mistakes, please tell me.
I'd like to talk about my favorite movie, it's 'Fargo'.It talks about someone who works for an automobile company and he is the general manager. He is married to a beautiful wife and he has an 8-year-old child.
He has prepared his feasibility study about his dream business. So, he goes to his father-in-law and presents it in the front of him but he refuses to sponsor it and he tells him that money doesn't grow on trees. And he has to depend on himself and to take responsibility for himself.
He gets in a deal with 2 criminals and they agreed there will no be blood in this plan. They burgle the house, kidnaps his wife and they hurt his child. They drive their car heading to the a safe place. Once they get there, the sheriff stops the car and he charges them with reckless driving. They're quite insane, the weirdo kills the sheriff. A car passes right by them and sees the murder. The 2 criminals follow them and they kill them too.
Well done Mohamed! Good try. Sounds like an interesting story.
Some of the story is in the present tense and some of it is in the past tense. So, I changed most of it to the present tense. Please remember to put a full stop at the end of the sentence, leave a space and then start with a capital letter. If you look at all the major publications, this is the common way of writing in English and many other European languages.
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please help me with muy presentation any correction and mistakes please tell me
I'd like to talk about my favorite movie it's (fargo)It is about person who works for an automobile company and he is the general manager , he is married with a beautiful woman and he has an 8 years old child , he prepared his feasibility study about his dream business so he went to his father-in- law and presented it in the front of him but he refused and he told him that money doesn't grow on trees an he has to depend on himself and to take responsibility of himself.He got a deal with 2 criminals and they agreed there will be no blood in this plan .
They burgled the house , kidnapped his wife and they hurt the child.They (who?) drove their car heading to the safe place. once The sheriff stopped the car and he charged them about reckless driving , they were quite insane , the weirdo killed the sheriff . The car passed right them and saw the murder , the 2 criminals followed them and they killed them too.
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You need to make all of your sentences shorter
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