Need corrections for a very short story- Пьяная лягушка
English:
Drunk Frog
There was a green frog who liked to drink beer. He woke up late. He ran. He jumped over a pond. When he got to the party, he drank beer and laughed all night.
Russian Draft:
Пьяная лягушка
Лягуша зелёная кто пиво нравится пить. Он проснулся поздно. Он бегал. Он прыгал через пруд. Когда лягуша прибывал на вечеринка, всю ночь он пил и смеялся.
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Need corrections for a very short story- Пьяная лягушка
English:Drunk Frog
There was a green frog who liked to drink beer. He woke up late. He ran. He jumped over a pond. When he got to the party, he drank beer and laughed all night.
Russian Draft:
"Adaptation"
Жила была* зеленая лягушка, которая любила пить пиво. Проснулась она поздно, переплыла пруд и попрыгала на вечеринку. А когда добралась, всю ночь пила пиво и громко смеялась.
Жила была* - many Russian fairy tales begin with these words.
He ran - in the Russian language, the frog "jumps" and does not "run."
Frog - in the Russian language, the word "frog" has a feminine gender. But can designate both a man and a woman.
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Пьяная лягушка
Пьяный лягушонок (5)
Жил-был один зелёный лягушонок, который любил пить пиво. Он вставал поздно. Бегал. Прыгал по пруду. Когда лягушонок попадал на вечеринку, он всю ночь пил пиво и смеялся.
1) it's how fairy-tales usually start in Russian, compare with "Once upon a time..."
2) "один/одна/одно/одни" is used when there is an indefinite article 'a' and you want to emphasize that this is the thing mentioned for the first time, unknown, A [ei] frog with the logical stress on "a"
3) there's no need to repeat the subject, as its form is clear from the form of the verb: "-ла" ending for the 3 pers.sing.fem.
4) "на вечеринку" – where to? direction - - - Accusative Case (Prepositional/Locative Case is for "where? location")
5) I've suggested to render the text with "лягушонок" (a small male frog), as it would be logical to have a male character in such a context, and "лягушка" is grammatically feminine ;)
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Need corrections for a very short story- Пьяная лягушка
English:Drunk Frog
There was a green frog who liked to drink beer. He woke up late. He ran. He jumped over a pond. When he got to the party, he drank beer and laughed all night.
Russian Draft:
Пьяная лягушка
Жила-была зеленая лягушка, которая любила пить пиво. Она проснулась поздно. Она бегала. Она прыгала через пруд. Когда лягушка побывала на вечеринке, она пила пиво и смеялась всю ночь.
(Even editing one sentence is helpful. Adding explanations of edits are also helpful. Thanks!)
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Need corrections for a very short story- Пьяная лягушка
English:Drunk Frog
There was a green frog who liked to drink beer. He woke up late. He ran. He jumped over a pond. When he got to the party, he drank beer and laughed all night.
Russian Draft:
Пьяная лягушка
Была одна зелёная лягушка которой нравилось пить пиво . Она проснулась поздно. Она бегала. Она прыгала через пруд. Когда лягушка прибыла на вечеринку, всю ночь она пила и смеялась.
(Even editing one sentence is helpful. Adding explanations of edits are also helpful. Thanks!)
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