Freezing days -Correction please!
Last month, we had much snow in Tokyo area. We seldom had such a heavy snow, so the snow gave us beautiful scenery and lucky holiday and heavy traffic jam. Two over three were very nice to me but the other one was horrible to everyone.
I personally think every car should wear snow tires in winter, but in this area, there are still so many people commuting by car with summer tires. That's why I saw many cars fallen off to the field when they pass the other ones in a narrow country road. On my way back from my office, even a huge truck stacked in the middle of the bypass because of the slope of the bridge. The huge truck blocked both lanes, so everyone had to change the route. For me, it took twice as much as an ordinary day going back to home.
Last week, we had another snow. Countless flakes of snow falling from the gray sky made me happy again. But this time I hoped everyone to stay safe with friends or family, enjoying the scenery from the window getting whiter and whiter, of course, without thinking of shoveling the snow in front of the house.
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Freezing Days (Correction please!)
Last month, we simply had too much snow in the Tokyo area. We seldom have such a heavy snowfall, so it not only gave us beautiful scenery and an unscheduled holiday, but also horrible traffic jams! Two of the three were very nice for me, but the last caused misery for everyone.
I personally think every car should have snow tires in winter, but in this area, there are still so many people driving their vehicles on “summer” tires. That lack of traction is why I saw many cars sitting in fields after they had, unfortunately, skidded off the road after they had tried to pass other vehicles on narrow country roads. On my way back from my office, there was even a huge truck stuck in the middle of the bypass because of the slope of the bridge. The truck maddeningly blocked both lanes, so everyone driving had to find another route.
As a result, for me, it took twice as long as my usual commute on an ordinary day to return home. And, just last week, we also had another snow. The countless flakes of it falling from the gray sky made me happy again. But this time, I hoped everyone would stay safely inside with friends or family, enjoying the scenery from the comfort of a window as it grew whiter and whiter, but of course, without thinking about the need to shovel the snow away from the front of the house later!
Hi Shoji. Good job! Whatever changes that I’ve made were merely done to allow your sentences to sound more natural to my native ears, for clarity, and to complete your thoughts. Apologies if I misinterpreted! I hope that this helps you. J. *P.S. Nice picture!
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Freezing days -Correction please!
Last month, we had much snow in the Tokyo area. We seldom have had such a heavy snowfall, so the snow but it gave us beautiful scenery and a lucky impromptu holiday and but also heavy traffic jams. Two over out of three were is very nice to me I think, but the other one was horrible to for everyone.I personally think that every car should wear ( or be fitted with) snow tires in winter, but in this area there are still so many people commuting by car with using summer tires. That's why I saw many cars fallen off into the fields when because they had tried passing the each other ones in on narrow country roads. On my way back from my the office, even a huge truck was stacked up in the middle of the bypass because of the slope of the bridge. The huge truck blocked both lanes, so everyone had to change their routes. For me, it took twice as much long as an ordinary day usual going back to home.
Last week, we had another more snow. Countless flakes of snow falling from the grey sky made me feel happy again. But this time I hoped everyone was choosing to stay safe with friends or family, to enjoying the scenery from their windows as everything was getting whiter and whiter. Of course, without thinking of about shovelling the snow from the front of their houses.
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