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Ted Talks : Being true to yourself This story is about your ability to believe that you could without setting limits. Caroline Casey is full of vitality and she is such a woman who has always challenged what she wants to do. When she was a child, she wanted to be Mowgli from "The Jungle Book." She admired the dynamic boy who is true to himself. When she turned 17 years old, she accidentally knew that she has been legally blind since birth. Actually, her parents didn’t tell her that because they didn’t want her to place any labels and didn’t want to limit her possibilities. Even though she couldn’t see well, she grow up surviving any difficulties and she continued doing what she wants to do after being told she is blind. A few years after getting a consulting firm job, she really could see very little and unfortunately had to quit the job. She was depressed, lost her belief and kept thinking over and over in her mind what she should do. Finally, she realized what she wants to be is the Mowgli. She decided to be an elephant handler (like Mowgli). She had no idea where to start but she somehow raised enough money for 6,000 cataract eye operations, walking across India with an elephant. She thinks when you believe from the bottom of your heart, you can make it happen. No matter who you are, you shouldn’t label and limit. Dear Ann, Thank you for correcting my mistakes, Ann! And thank you for pointing out two things to me! Please let me explain a little. (1) …she accidentally knew that she has been legally blind since birth. When she accompanied her little sister who went to an eye doctor, she also got her eyes tested just for fun. As a result of that, she was diagnosed with weak eyesight. It was unexpected event. (2) …she somehow raised enough money for 6,000 cataract eye operations,…. She raised the money that 6000 patients could have surgery on eye. Thank you for reading this to the end! (*^-^*)/ Annさん、私の間違いを修正していただき、ありがとうございます!また、2点ご指摘いただき、ありがとうございます。それについて、少し説明させて下さいね。 (1) …she accidentally knew that she has been legally blind since birth. 彼女は妹が眼科に行くのに付き添った時、彼女も興味本位で眼科検診を受けた。その結果、彼女は視力が弱いことを診断された。それは、想定外の出来事だった。 (2) …she somehow raised enough money for 6,000 cataract eye operations,…. 彼女は、6000人が白内障の手術を受けることができる金額を集めた。 最後まで読んでいただき、ありがとうございます。

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Ted Talks : Being true to yourself

This story is about your ability to believe that you can do anything without setting limits on yourself.

Caroline Casey is full of vitality and she is such a woman who has always challenged what she wants to do herself.
When she was a child, she wanted to be Mowgli from "The Jungle Book." She admired the dynamic boy who was true to himself.

When she turned 17 years old, she accidentally (what do you mean here? That she suddenly found out?) knew that she has been legally blind since birth.
Actually, her parents didn’t tell her that because they didn’t want her to place to put any labels on her and didn’t want to limit her possibilities. Even though she couldn’t see well, she grow up surviving any difficulties and she continued doing what she wanted to do, even after being told she was blind.

A few years after getting a consulting firm job, she really could see very little and unfortunately had to quit the job as she could see very little. She was depressed, lost her belief and kept thinking over and over in her mind what she should do. Finally, she realized that she wanted to be is the Mowgli.
She decided to be an elephant handler (like Mowgli). She had no idea where to start but she somehow raised enough money for 6,000 cataract eye operations, walking across India with an elephant. (Did she have 6,000 separate cataract operations? Or did the cataract operations cost 6,000 [some type of money]?)

She thinks when you believe from the bottom of your heart, you can make it happen. No matter who you are, you shouldn’t label and limit.


Really awesome job! The grammar is really good, the only thing I noticed really were some tense shifts within sentences (switching from present to past). The yellow edits are for grammar or if something is unclear and the green edits are to make it more natural-sounding:) 

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