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The factory XXX is located in Russia and produces baby food for Russian market. The weakened Russian Economy and rapidly changing marketplace have a direct impact on company’s sales. Thus, during the period of economic and political uncertainty of Russia it was very important to incorporate scenario-based planning and econometric modeling to identify the potential impact of changes conditions. During the planning process, I identify the economic indicators that impact the baby food business and build a financial model to establish a historical relationship between organizational performance and economic indicators. By analyzing the ripple effects of the different versions of a weakened Russian economy, I can identify contingency plans and tactical, operational solutions.
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The factory XXX is located in Russia and produces baby food for Russian market. The weakened Russian Economy and rapidly changing marketplace have a direct impact on company’s sales. Thus, during the period of economic and political uncertainty of Russia it was very important to incorporate scenario-based planning and econometric modeling to identify the potential impact of changes conditions. During the planning process, I identify the economic indicators that impact the baby food business and build a financial model to establish a historical relationship between organizational performance and economic indicators. By analyzing the ripple effects of the different versions of a weakened Russian economy, I can identify contingency plans and tactical, operational solutions.The factory of XXX is located in Russia, and it produces baby food for the Russian market. The weakened Russian economy and the rapidly changing marketplace have a direct impact on the company's sales. Thus, during this period of economical and political uncertainty, it is very important for the company to utilise scenario-based planning as well as econometric modelling to help it identify the potential impact of these changes on its sales. During the planning process, I had identified the various economic indicators that are relevant for the baby food business, and , with these as yardsticks, I built a financial model that is able to establish a historical relationship between these indicators and the sales performance of the company. By analysing the ripple effects of the many different scenarios of a weakened Russian economy, I could come out with a contingency plan for each of them as well as offering other tactical and operational solutions.
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The factory XXX is located in Russia and produces baby food for the Russian market. The This (Is "the" referring to baby food?) weakened the Russian economy and rapidly changed the marketplace, which in turn has a direct impact on company’s sales. Thus, during the this period of economic and political uncertainty in Russia, it *was very important to incorporate scenario-based planning and econometric modeling to identify the potential impact of changes conditions. During the planning process, I identify the economic indicators that impact the baby food business. and In addition to this, I also build a financial model to establish a historical relationship between organizational performance and economic indicators. By analyzing the rippling effects of the different versions of a weakened Russian economy, I can identify contingency plans and tactical, operational solutions.*is this preset or past tense? If it is present, change "was" for "is"
Note: In general, the tense changes in this paragraph. I can take a second look at it if you tell me what tense you would like it to be.
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The factory XXX is located in Russia and produces baby food for Russian market. The weakened Russian economy and rapidly changing marketplace have a direct impact on the company’s sales. Thus, during the this period of economic and political uncertainty of Russia it was very important to incorporate scenario-based planning and econometric modeling to identify the potential impact of changes changing conditions. During the planning process, I identify the economic indicators that impact the baby food business and build a financial model to establish a historical relationship between organizational performance and economic indicators. By analyzing the ripple effects of the different versions of a weakened Russian economy, I can identify contingency plans and tactical, operational solutions.You are changing tenses a lot. You start out in present tense for the first two sentences, and then switch to past tense in the third, and then back to present in the fourth. I can't really tell if you already went through this planning process or are currently working on it or are telling us what you are planning to do.
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