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IELTS writing part 2: Write your opinion about advertisements IELTS General Writing Task 2

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I just wrote the IELTS task 2 and I would appriciate, if you could read and correct the letter. At the end I would appriciate if you could tell me how many points I would receive in your opinion on a scale from 1 to 9.

Task

Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Writing

In the following article I would like to give my opinion, if advertisements encourages us to buy items that we do not need or if they inform us about items that are helpful in daily life. First of all I would say that all advertisements are produced to sell a thing. Whether it is necessary or not, it is the same goal. Therefore you can imagine that a lot of people are buying things that they will never use. But they will argue that it is important for this certain situation, which was descriptive in the commercial. Like the kitchen aid I bought many years ago. The ad promised that cooking and baking will be fun, because you do not have to do anything. In the end I didn't have fun and so I never used the device again. This is just an example and there would have been several more. The other argument that advertisements represent new things that will change our life is also true. Because all the companies are telling that they have the best product and it will change your future in a way. What they do not say is, if your life will be positive changed or if there is just less money in your wallet, because the item you bought is just a waste of money. In the end I would like to summarize the points I just explained. All the advertisements are made for encourage customers to buy something. Most of the time it says that it will affect your life positive. So I would suggest to all people to think about the benefit and if they really need that thing or if it is just a waste of money.

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I didn't know what to write to this topic, therefore it is not a good article...maybe you have some suggestions what I could have written instead.

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In the following article I would like to give my opinion, if on whether or not I think advertisements encourages us to buy items that we do not need or if they inform us about items that are helpful in daily life.

First of all, I would say that all advertisements are produced to sell a thing something. Whether it is necessary or not, it is the same this is always the goal. Therefore, you can imagine that a lot of people are buying things that they will never use. But They will argue that it is important for this a certain situation, which was descriptive most likely was described in the commercial. This has occurred in my personal experience with a *Like the kitchen aid Kitchen-Aid I bought many years ago. The ad promised that cooking and baking will would be fun, because you do not have to do anything. In the end I didn't have fun and so I never used the device again. This is just an one example and there would have been several more. out of several others.

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The other On the other hand, the argument that advertisements represent new things that will change your life is also true. Because All the companies are telling that they have claiming to sell the best product and say it will change your future in a way. What they do not say is, if your life will be positive changed positively or if there is will just be less money in your wallet, because the item you bought is just a waste of money. due to the uselessness of the item you just bought.

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Writing

In the following article I would like to give my opinion, on the topic of if advertisements encourages encouraging us to buy items that we do not need. or if they inform us about items that are helpful in daily life.
First of all, I would say that all advertisements are produced to sell a thing something. Whether it is necessary or not, it is the they follow the same goal. Therefore you can imagine that a lot of people are buying things that they will never use. But they will argue that it is important for this certain situation, which was descriptive in the commercial. Like the kitchen aid I bought many years ago. The ad promised that cooking and baking will be fun, because you do not have to do anything. In the end I didn't have fun and so I never used the device again. This is just an one example and there would have been several more.
The other argument that advertisements represent new things that will change our life new and life-changing things is also true. Because all the companies are telling that they have the saying they have best product and that it will change your future in a way somehow. What they do not say is, if whether your life will be positively changed or if there is just less money in your wallet, because the item you bought is just was a waste of money.
In the end I would like to summarize the points I just explained. All the advertisements are made for to encourage customers to buy something. Most of the time it says that it it will affect your life positively. So I would suggest to all people to think about the benefit and if they really need that thing or if it is just a waste of money.

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