IELTS writing practice 01: job security or job satisfaction
The topic is: Some people think job satisfaction is more important than job security, other people think one should find a permanence job.Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Here is my essay:
Since job is becoming a more and more indispensable part of modern life, people's attitude towards it has undergone great changes as well. Some people believe that doing the favorable job is of vital importance. However, it is also argued that people should put job security first. The following essay will debate the two statements in further detail.
There are some convincing arguments supporting that job satisfaction has a great influence on people's career. Firstly, job satisfaction could bring the great sense of achievements or identity. Therefore, people tend to place more energy on their work, which, more importatntly, contributes to the success in career. Secondly, a man who has passion in his job would never fail to gain happiness. For the busy, energy-drained modern people, being in good mood at work will help them get less pressure and more health. Besides, doing the work one prefer means the higher chance to work with the like-minded colleagues, since it is people with the same value or opinion that are likely to prefer the same job. Thus, both work efficiency and satisfying comradeship will be developed.
By contrast, job security will also be a sensible choice given the reasons presented below. First, for those who want to make a living, permanent job is a better choice, because it can provide stable income to make sure that they can not only sustain life but also enjoy it. By contrast, doing whatever one wants may make him trapped into unemployment or frequent job-hopping. Besides, the aim of doing a permanent job is not just restricted in simply earning money, but to fight for a rather solid reputation and a stable social network. For example, a civil servant is more likely to be considered as trustworthy compared with a freelance.
Personally, I think the two statements are both valid but under respective conditions. In consideration of social class or family background, people in different situations should make different choices. With a relatively good family condition, someone are more suggested to look for an ideal job, thus he may achieve self-value through the process of chasing his dream. However, if someone is in the urgent need to support his family, then job security should be the first thing to ensure.
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My edits are below in green - Had to submit it in 2 comments since the system only allows for 5000 characters.
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Since one's job is becoming a more indispensable part of modern life, peoples' attitudes towards their jobs have undergone great changes as well; some believe that having a favorable job is of vital importance, while others argue job security should come first. The following essay will debate the two arguments in further detail.There are some convincing arguments supporting the notion that job satisfaction has a great influence on one's career. Firstly, job satisfaction could bring a great sense of achievement or identity, resulting in one putting more energy into his/her work, which contributes to overall success in one's career. Secondly, a man or woman who has passion for his/her job would never fail to achieve happiness. For the busy, energy-drained, modern person, being in a good mood at work helps him/her relieve stress which leads to better health. Additionally, doing work one prefers means there is a higher chance to work with like-minded colleagues, since people with the same values or opinions are more likely to prefer the same job. Thus, both work efficiency and satisfying comradeship will result.
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In conclusion, I think both statements are valid but under respective conditions. With regard to social class or family background, people in different situations will make different choices. With a relatively good family condition, one may feel inclined to look for an ideal job, thus achieving self-value by chasing his/her dream. However, if someone urgently needs to support his/her family, then job security should be the first thing to guarantee.
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In contrast, job security is also a sensible choice, given the reasons presented below. First,
for those who want to make a living, a permanent job is a better choice because it can provide stable
income and ensure a sustainable and enjoyable life, as doing whatever one wants may lead
to unemployment or frequent job-hopping. Having a permanent job is not to just simply earn money, but to achieve a solid reputation and stable social
network. For example, a civil servant is more likely to be considered as trustworthy
compared with a freelancer.
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Hello - I have submitted edits below in three parts as the system would not let me submit all at once .. The first part starts at the bottom
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