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Trying to translate Japanese wiki into English 6 Shawshank 5 In1963, prison library gets a budget for every years and the library which was almost as same as warehouse becomes a place where prisoners can relax and get knowledge result from Andy’s effort that he has been sending letters to the state legislature. Meanwhile, warden starts to make prisoners work outside under the pretext of reforming prisoners and warden starts to get a bribe from constructors. Andy creates a fake person named “Randall Stevens” and hides a lot of illegal savings brilliantly. In 1965, a new prisoner named Tony who was arrested by sneak thieving gets along with Red and his group soon and Andy also gets to like him. Andy starts to teach Tony about study which is started from how to read and write because Tony hoped to reform himself. Eventually Tony succeeds in getting high school diploma. Tony happens to know the past of Andy and Tony says he may know the true murderer who killed Andy’s wife and her lover. Although Andy claims warden that Andy wants to do a retrial, warden sends Andy to a punishment chamber and try to changing his mind because warden doesn’t want to let Andy free as he is skillful bank accountant and he knows about illegal savings. Due to Andy has never been giving up for over one month, warden and Henley lose their temper. They call Tommy who knows crucial evidence about Andy’s false charge and kill him with a gun. Several days later, they tell a lie to Andy that they killed Tommy because he tried to escaped. 1963年、アンディが州議会にさらに手紙を送り続けた結果、年度毎の予算まで獲得し、倉庫同然だった図書館は囚人達の娯楽と教養を得る場となっていた。その頃所長は、囚人達の社会更生を図るという名目で、彼らを労働力として野外作業をさせ始め、そのピンハネや土建業者達からの賄賂を受け取り始める。そしてアンディは「ランドール・スティーブンス」という架空の人物を作り出し、その多額の不正蓄財を見事に隠蔽していた。 1965年、新たに入所したコソ泥のトミーは、すぐにレッドの仲間達と打ち解け、アンディも彼を気に入る。更生を望むトミーにアンディは文字の読み書きから勉強を教え始め、やがて高校卒業資格を申請するにまで至る。トミーはアンディの過去を知ると、その真犯人に心当たりがあることを話す。アンディは所長に再審請求したいと頼み込むが、優秀な経理担当者と同時に不正蓄財を知っている彼を自由にさせる気のない所長は、アンディを懲罰房に入れ考えを改めるよう迫る。1ヶ月経っても折れないアンディに業を煮やした所長とハドリーは、冤罪証明の鍵を握るトミーを呼び出して射殺、後日アンディには「脱走したため撃った」と嘘を伝える。

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In 1965, a new prisoner named Tony who was arrested by for sneak thieving("petty theft" is more commonly used) gets along with Red and his group soon and Andy also gets to like him. Andy starts to teach Tony about studying which is started from how to read and write because Tony hoped to reform himself. (Better is "Because Tony hopes to reform himself, Andy starts to teach Tony, beginning with how to read and write.")Eventually Tony succeeds in getting a/his high school diploma. Tony happens to know the Andy's past of Andy and Tony says he may know the true murderer who killed Andy’s wife and her lover.(Or: "Tony happens to know things about/from Andy's past and Tony says he may know the true murderer of Andy's wife and her lover.") Although Andy claims tells the warden that Andy wants to do a retrial, the warden sends Andy to a punishment chamber and trytries to changing his mind because the warden doesn’t want to let Andy free as he is a skillful bank accountant and he knows about the warden's illegal savings/finances.("warden" is a title, and this is a specific warden, so "the warden" is best.  Could also do "and tries to change his mind"  "to" with an "-ing" verb usually doesn't work.  I took out "bank" because though he was a bank manager or something, his use to the warden is more generally as an accountant, not a bank accountant.  a "bank accountant" works in a bank.) Due to Andy has never been giving up for over one month, the warden and Henley lose their temper. ("煮やす”が面白いです。)They call out Tommy who knows crucial evidence about Andy’s false charge and kill him with a gun. Several days later, they tell a lie to Andy that they killed Tommy because he tried to escaped.("tried" conveys the past tense "to escape" is just the verb form of what he was trying to do.  I added "call out" because I think it goes better with 呼び出す。  I don't remember if they called him out to the yard or what.)
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Trying to translate Japanese wiki into English 6 Shawshank 5

In1963, the prison library gets a budget (for) every years and in 1963, the library, which was almost asthe same as a warehouse, becomes a place where prisoners can relax and get knowledge resulting from Andy’s effort that he has been of/in sending letters to the state legislature.(",which was almost like a warehouse," is better. 1963 at the beginning is strange because you say they get a budget every year, not just in 1963.  "for" can be omitted here.) Meanwhile, the warden starts to make prisoners work outside under the pretext of reforming prisoners and the warden starts to get a bribe from constructors.(You can omit the second "starts to" and say instead "and the warden gets bribes from contractors".  I think "contractors" is slightly better for 土建業者, they are "construction contractors" which most "contractors" are, if the kind of contractor isn't specified.)Andy creates a fake person named “Randall Stevens” and hides a lot of illegal savings brilliantly.

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