The three little pigs (Part Two)

(3) We should be using "his shoulders" as we are referring to a part of the man's body. Therefore, you may write: The first pig met a man who had on his shoulders a bale of straw. I chose to write: "The first pig met a man who had a bale of straw on his shoulders." because "had" indicates possession -- the man possessed a bale of straw. 

(4) When you wrote "accepted it", it gives the reader an idea that the man took something from the pig. In fact, it was the pig who asked the man for some straw. In other words, the pig requested for something from the man. When we say "yes" to a request, we "accede to a request".

*In English, we wish someone well by telling them to "take care". However, we ask them to "be careful" of danger.

Hope this helps.
Cheers,

Lance

The three little pigs

They grew up and one day their mum said them : “You are tall now and our house is so short, you must leave and build each your own home.” .> When they were all grown up, their mum said to them one day : " You are all big now, and our house is too small for all of us, so all of you must leave home and build a house of your own".

Before to say goodbye, their mother recommended them : “Take careful, don’t open the door at the big bad wolf.”> Before saying their goodbyes to their mum, they had this piece of advice from their mother: " Take good care of yourself. Never open your door to a wolf". 
The three pigs chose a different way.> The three pigs then went different ways.
The first pig met a man who had on the shoulders a straw bale. The pig tell him : “Could you please give me this?” The man accepted it. So the small pig built quickly his new home and after he rested.

> One of the pig met a man who was carrying a bale of straws on his shoulder. The pig said to him, " Could you please give me that?" The man agreed. Later, the little pig used the straw to quickly build his house, after which he took a rest.
The second pig met a old man who carried on the arm wood. The pig asked him : “I would like take you your wood, it is possible?” “Yes, it is” replied the old man. Then The pig built his wood house.

>Another pig met an old man who was carrying some wood on his arms. The pig asked him: " I would like to have your wood, is that possible?" Sure, of course," replied the old man. With the wood, the pig then built a wooden house.
The third went at mason in town and paid bricks et stones and for several days, he built his beautiful house.

> The last pig went to a mason in town and bought bricks, stones, etc., and , after several days, it had finished building a beautiful house for itself.

The three little pigs (Part One)

The three pigs chose a different way. to do things their own way.

The first pig met a man who had (3) a bale of straw on his shoulderson the shoulders a straw bale. The pig told tell him, “Could you please give me this?” The man acceded to its request(4) .accepted it. So the small pig built quickly built his new home and after doing so, he rested.

The second pig met an old man who carried some wood in his arms. on the arm wood. The pig asked him, “I would like to use your wood. May I? take you your wood, it is possible?” “Yes, you may," it is” replied the old man. Then, the pig built his wooden house.

The third pig went at to a mason in town and paid for some bricks and et stones. After and for several days, he built his beautiful house.

Hi Solenn,

I like your story. It brings back nostalgic memories of my childhood storybooks. I think the morale of the story is: You sow what you reap. Just a few suggestions for you:

(1) When we "recommend" something to someone, we suggest an idea because we have tried it before and it worked for us. Therefore, we have some faith that the idea should work for someone else too. However, I believe the Mother Pig wanted to give them a warning. When we "advise" someone, we draw on our wisdom and knowledge and share it with someone. There is an element of warning and care in a piece of advice. 

Example: The doctor advised me to exercise regularly to keep myself healthy. / I recommended this hotel to her as I know they provide exceptional service. 

(2) We open the door "for" someone. We use "for" here to indicate a purpose -- the purpose is to permit someone to enter.

The three little pigs

The first pig met a man who had a straw bale on the his shoulders a straw bale. The pig tell told him : “Could you please give me this?” The man accepted it. So the small pig built quickly quickly built his new home, and after that he rested.
The second pig met a an old man who carried wood on the his arm wood. The pig asked him : “I would like to take you your wood, it is is it possible?” “Yes, it is” replied the old man. Then The the pig built his wood house.
The third went at to a mason in town and paid for bricks et and stones and for several days, he built his beautiful house.

Voilà les corrections! Je crois que tu essaies de traduire le français directement en anglais. Je peux presque voir les mots dans ta tête :) If faut s'habituer de penser en anglais sans avoir les mots français à la tête...