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Essay : environmental damage in big cities Hi everyone, I would like you to correct this essay for me. Thanks in advance! Environmental damage in big cities Our world is being damaged more and more overtime. Further more, we are contribuiting to it every time we use our cars and throw litter at the sea. Consequently, it is our fault and we should make humans the only rescuer of our planet. Something people cannot live without is cars, which pollutes the air. What's more, it is a dangerous means of transport. In order to hel the planet and avoid accidents, citizens could use public transport from time to time. It is safer and pollutes less the air we all breathe. Nevertheless, not only is the air contaminated, seas and rivers are also being affected, which can kill animals that live in them. We can avoid this by, for instance, not allowing people to eat or drink on the beach. Also, many species of animals are endangered because of us. This problem can be solved if we all do our bit. Not only are seas and rivers polluted, forests are full of litter, because people do not take care of them. As well as that, there are many fires which put in danger animals and people. This could change if the entrace to forests was restricted. To sum up, we can change and save our planet by making a plan and making everybody take part in it

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Essay : environmental damage in big cities

Hi everyone,

I would like you to correct this essay for me. Thanks in advance!

Environmental Damage in Big Cities

Our world is being damaged more and more over time. Furthermore, we are contribuiting to it every time we use our cars and throw litter in the sea. Consequently, it is our fault and we should make humans the only rescuer of our planet.

Something people cannot live without is cars, which pollutes the air. What's more, it is a dangerous means of transport. In order to help the planet and avoid accidents, citizens could use public transport from time to time. It is safer and pollutes less the air we all breathe.

Nevertheless, not only is the air contaminated, seas and rivers are also being affected, which can kill animals that live in them. We can avoid this by, for instance, not allowing people to eat or drink on the beach. Also, many species of animals are endangered because of us. This problem can be solved if we all do our bit.

Not only are seas and rivers polluted, forests are full of litter, because people do not take care of them. As well as that, there are many fires which put in danger animals and people.  (I would change this sentence to say: In addition to that, there are many fires which put animals and people in danger.) This could change if the entrances to forests were restricted.

To sum up, we can change and save our planet by making a plan and making everybody take part in it.

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Thanks Annalisa !
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without THEIR car and not is car...at the beginning of second paragraph

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