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A thought about the book " The five people you meet in heaven" On the last Saturday, I read a book by the name of "the five people you meet in heaven, written by Mitch Albom, which my senior in army lent to me. (Yes, I am a soldier! It has been just 2 monthes I have started the military service. Besides, all of South Korean guys who are healthy enough to do the military servcice should be soldiers at least for 21 monthes!) It was a relatively think book compared to the last book I had read by the name of "Extremly loud & Incredibly close". I went to the "reading room" to read this book, because the room I share with other soldiers is too noisy due to the television sound. I spent about straight three hours reading this book. I could not put this book away from my hands, since it was one of those "page-turners" I had read. However, after reading the whole story of this book, I felt a little disappointment. That's why I decided to write a text on this italki website, so that I can share my opinions with other people. The main story is like this: The main character of this book ( What is the one fancy word for this meaning? I just looked this word up in the Internet dictionary about two days ago, but I cannot get it out of my head. I just forgot it lol) was dead by accident, and found his way to the heaven, meeting five people on the way there. Each of five people who are connected with this main character in the real world taught him the values which are needed to enter the gate of heaven. In the process of learning, the main figure realized the meaning of life and left the world without regret and a sense of guilt and sorry. Quite simple, huh? This book is written in easy manner for readers to pick up the gist of the book without any difficulties, which I supposed made this book not the book that people want to read once again. So I have to say this book is not a good book since the author of this book did not leave anything for readers to ruminate the contents of this book. Plus, the characters in this book are all good, except for just one person ; the main characters's father who had always abused him. The clear line between (or is it more correct to say "distinction?) characters made this novel less interesting. So I wished the auther had more concerns for readers so that we could think of the values for times and realize the meaning of story by ourselves, which tends to last longer time.

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A thought about the book " The Five People You Meet In Heaven"

On the Last Saturday I read a book by the name of "The Five People You Meet In Heaven", written by Mitch Albom.  which my senior in army senior lent to me. (Yes, I am a soldier! It has been was just 2 monthes I that I had have started the military National Service. Besides, All of able bodied South Korean guymales who are healthy enough to do the military servcice should be soldiers  drafted for at least for 21 monthes!) It was a relatively think book compared to the last book I had read,  by the name of "Extremely Loud & Incredibly Close" in the reading room because the room I shared with my bunkmates was too noisy because the TV was on. I went to the "reading room" to read this book, because the room I share with other soldiers is too noisy due to the television sound. I spent about straight  For three hours straight, I reading this book. I could not put this book away from my hands tear myself from it, since it was one of those "page-turners" I had read. [Don't understand what you are trying to say and I don't speak Korean :( ]  However, after reading the whole story of this book, I felt was a little disappointmented. That's why I decided to write a text about it on this italki website so that I can share my opinions with other people.

The main synopsis of story is like this: The main character of this book ( What is the one fancy word for this meaning? I just looked this word up in the Internet dictionary about two days ago, but I cannot get it out of my head. I just forgot it lol) 1was dead killed by accidentally, and found his way to the heaven.  He meeting five people on the way there. Each of the five people who are connected with this main character in the real world 2taught him the values which are needed to enter the gate of heaven. In the During this learning process of learning, the main figure he realized the meaning of life and left theis world without regret and a sense of guilt and sorry. Quite simple, huh isn't it3?

This book is written in easy manner easy reading for readers to pick up the gist4 of the book without any difficulties, which I supposed made this book not the book that people want to read once again. So I have to say this book is not a good did not like the book5 since because the author of this book did not leave anything room for readers to ruminate6 the contents of this book. Plus, Also there are too many villans in the book for my taste7 for example the abusive father of our hero. 8the characters in this book are all good, except for just one person ; the main characters's father who had always abused him. The clear line 9 between (or is it more correct to say "distinction?) characters 10 that made this novel less interesting. So I wished the autheor had more concerns for readers so that we could think of the values for times and realize the meaning of story by ourselves, which tends to last longer time. would elaborate on the social values of that time and develop the characters more so that readers can make a better judgment of the story. 11

1.  The "hero" or the main character is "protagonist" .  The chief enemy is called "antagonist".

2.  No need to tell the reader about the protagonist.  We already know you are talking about him.

3.  You are writing in a formal style, so don't mix slang unless it is for effect.

4.  Gist is another word for synopsis.  Your usage is incorrect since the contents of the book is original unless you are reading cliff notes.

5.  You cannot say if a book is good or bad (in this context you are writing about) because other people may find it great.  It is better to use, "I did not like it".  Then people cannot really argue with you since it is your opinion.

6.  Since the level of English you are writing is not in a grand style, do not use such big and complicated words when there is a simpler word for it.   The simpler word is "mull".  You can use other ways to express yourself simply.  For example, "the author did not leave room for the reader to image what is happening next"

7.  See note 5 about personal opinions

8.  You need to give a few more examples to support your opinion.

9.  There is no distinction between "clear line" or "distinction". :)

10.  You must have two things to compare with when you use the word "between".  One thing is the characters and so what is the other thing you are comparing with?  "Among" is the word to use for three or more things.

11.  This is your opinion in which others may beg to differ.  Anyway, great job in writing a critical piece.  Took me quite a while to edit this.  I think this piece is by far the longest I have edited.
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A thought about the book " The five people you meet in heaven"

On the Last Saturday, I read a book by the name of "The Five People You Meet in Heaven," written by Mitch Albom, which my senior in the army lent to me. (Yes, I am a soldier! It has been just 2 monthes since I have started the military service. Besides, all of South Korean guys who are healthy enough to do the military service should be soldiers at least for 21 months!) It was a relatively think (Not sure what you meant here - thick? or more like thought provoking?) book compared to the last book I had read by the name of "Extremly loud & Incredibly close." I went to the "reading room" to read this book, because the room I share with other soldiers is too noisy due to the television's sound. I spent about three straight hours reading this book. I could not put this book away from my hands down ('Away from my hands' is a little awkward sounding, instead I'm adding in a very common English expression to describe this) since it was one of those "page-turners." I had read. However, after reading the whole story of this book, I felt a little disappointment. That's why I decided to write a text on this italki website, so that I can share my opinions with other people.
The main story is like this: The main character of this book ( What is the one fancy word for this meaning? I just looked this word up in the Internet dictionary about two days ago, but I cannot get it out of my head. I just forgot it lol  -- Protagonist ^^ ) was dead by accident died in an accident, and found his way to the heaven, meeting five people on the way there. Each of five people who are connected with this main character in the real world, taught him the values which are needed to enter the gates of heaven. In the process of learning, the main figure realized the meaning of life and left the world without regret and or a sense of guilt and or sorry (Sorry is a bit awkward in this case, and also from how I think you mean it is the same as guilt.  Maybe something like 'sorrow' or 'sadness?'). Quite simple, huh?
This book is written in an easy manner for readers to pick up the gist of the book without any difficulties, which I supposed made this book not the a book that people want to read once again. So I have to say this book is not a good book since the author of this book did not leave anything for readers to ruminate about the contents of this book. Plus, the characters in this book are all good, except for just one person ; the main characters's father who had always abused him. The clear line between (or is it more correct to say "distinction?) characters made this novel less interesting. So I wished the auther had more concerns for readers so that we could think of the values for some times and realize the meaning of story by ourselves, which tends to last longer time.

That was good!  You're good at expressing yourself using English.  It seems you are a bit knowledgeable about literature too?  Good job! 
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