Why people are attracted to dangerous sports or dangerous activities?(please help me to correct)
Recently extreme sports have become a growing fashion in all over the world. Many people are enthusiastic about this kind of dangerous sports such as sky dive. These sports are totally different from traditional sports like basketball or jogging. People who play extreme sports must have enough courage instead of physical fitness.
Since playing such sports is so dangerous, why many people were still fascinated by it? I think that the most important factor is that it can make people excited. Nowadays heavy pressure from working makes people feel upset and boring, even cause depression, so doing dangerous activities becomes an alternative for people to seek the happiness and excitement. For example, one of the companies in my city just built an extreme sports gym for their staffs. And to their surprising, many employees in the company are engaged in playing dangerous sports in the gym, and they asserted that the productive of their staffs have improved since it can help them release pressure in working. So it seems that it is nature for people to seek excitement and playing such sports will become a trend in the foreseeable future.
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Why People are Attracted to Dangerous Sports or Dangerous Activities
Recently, participation in extreme sports has become a growing phenomenon all over the world. Many regular people, not just athletes, are wildly enthusiastic about doing such dangerous activities such a sky diving or bungee jumping. Unlike traditional sports which require a degree of skill, regular training, or team members, extreme sports simply require more courage than physical ability. You might wonder why then, since doing such sports is so dangerous, are so many people still fascinated by them?
My opinion is that by participating, people experience an emotional and physiological rush" or "high" above and beyond the activities in their everyday life. Nowadays, stress from school, from work, or both, often combines to leave people feeling tired, bored, or even depressed. And that's increased when coupled with the relatively safe, but monotonous existence, found in today's modernized cities. So doing dangerous things brings not only excitement from participating, but also happiness from successfully accomplishing whatever the activity required.
As an example, one of the companies in my city just built a gym dedicated solely to extreme sports for its staff, and to its surprise, the gym has been even more popular than expected. Furthermore, it claims that the morale and productivity of its employees have greatly improved as a result. So, given that it is natural for people to seek out challenges in order to experience the excitement, as well as a sense of accomplishment, greater participation in such sports should become a trend in the foreseeable future.
Hi Peng Li. Good job! Whatever changes I made were just to allow your ideas sound more natural to my native ears. I hope that this helps you. J.
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Why people are are people so attracted to dangerous sports or dangerous and activities?(please help me to correct)
Recently extreme Extreme sports, like sky diving, have recently become a growing fashion in grown in popularity all over the world. Many people are enthusiastic about this kind of these dangerous sports. such as sky dive. These sports are totally different from more traditional sports like basketball or jogging. Instead of physical fitness, People people who "play" extreme sports must have enough sufficient courage. instead of physical fitness. Note: I used quotes around the word "play" because people don't play extreme sports like they play regular sports. This is more of a stylistic choice.Since playing such extreme sports is so dangerous, why are so many people were still fascinated by it them? I think that the most important factor is that it can make people excited how excited they can make people. Nowadays, heavy pressure from working work makes people feel upset and ,boring, and even causes depression. so doing dangerous Dangerous activities becomes an alternative for people wanting to seek the happiness and excitement. For example, one of the companzes in my city just built an extreme sports gym for their staffs. And to To their surprising surprise, many company employees in the company are engaged in playing these dangerous sports in the gym, and they asserted that the productive of their staffs have improved since it can help them release pressure in working. So it seems that it is nature for people to seek excitement and playing such sports will become a trend in the foreseeable future.
Note: I went a little far with the corrections, your essay was very interesting to read! Very true
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Why people are attracted to dangerous sports or dangerous activities?(please help me to correct)
Recently, extreme sports have become a growing fashion in all over the world. (Here is a good example of where you need a comma after "Recently" otherwise it could sound like sports that are only extreme recently, that they are "recently extreme") Many people are enthusiastic about these kind of dangerous sports, sports such as sky diving. These sports are totally different from traditional sports like basketball or jogging. People who play extreme sports must have enough/sufficient courage instead of enough/sufficient physical fitness.Since playing such sports is so dangerous, why are many people were still fascinated by itthem? I think that the most important factor is that itthey/extreme sports can make people excited. Nowadays heavy pressure from working/work makes people feel upset and boringed, and can even cause depression.("The boring movie bored the girl and so she was bored.") So doing dangerous activities becomes an alternative way for people to seek the happiness and excitement. For example, one of the companies in my city just built an extreme sports gym for their staffs.("The company staff had many people on it. The staffs of both companies met together to discuss the merger.") And to their surprisinge, many employees in the company are engaged in playing dangerous sports in the gym, and they asserted that the productiveity of their staffs havehas improved since itextreme sports can help them release pressure infrom working.(That "it" refers to "productivity" not sports so I changed it. Also, they can't be that surprised if they built the gym. Better would be "Many employees in the company have become engaged in playing dangerous sports in the gym. Further, to their pleasant surprise, the company found that the productivity of their staff has improved since the sports allow them to release pressure built up from work.") So it seems that it is natural for people to seek excitement and playing such sports will become a trend in the foreseeable future.
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