Please help me check my conclusion paragraph~Thank you!

Please help me check my conclusion paragraph~Thank you!

In conclusion, it is preferable that individuals maintain long-term friendships with a small number of people as it allows those involved to understand each other better, and in more depth, which is the sign of a healthy and well-rounded relationship. What's more, having such relationships helps people as they experience life’s ups and downs since they know that they are not alone and have someone to depend on regardless of how they, themselves, are coping. Viewed in this manner, the ability to make and maintain friendships, especially those which endure over a long period of time, is of great benefit to, and of importance for, one's happiness.

Hi Jane. Good job! It is somewhat hard to write the “concluding paragraph” without knowing the points in the rest of your paper, but I tried! More than anything, I just “fleshed” out your ideas. Anyway, I hope that this helps you. J.

Please help me check my conclusion paragraph~Thank you!

In conclusion, it is more advisable for people to maintain the friendships with small number of people over long period of time since it encourages people understand each other better, which could share everything to friends. What's more, it helps people make life time real friends to whom can show their real face. The ability to maintain the friendships over long period of time more important for the happiness.

In conclusion, it is better for us to maintain the friendships of a select group of friends-- friends whom we can trust-- and build these relationships up over time, because, as time goes by, the more mutual understanding we have of one another will only get better, and they eventually become someone whom we can share our innermost feelings. What's more, this allows us to have genuine friendships and make life-long friends-- friends who have nothing to hide from us, and vice versa . To have the ability to maintain friendships over a long period of time is therefore important for our overall happiness .
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I am really confused about how to write the last paragraph of an essay. Please help me check the grammar and help me change some of the wordings, for I think some of the words used seem too simplistic or incorrect here.
Thank you so much!!