A nonsense story This is a complete nonsense story, but I would only practice some new words. The woman was going to dial the number on her telephone when, suddenly, she saw her son running around the

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A nonsense story This is a complete nonsense story, but I would only practice some new words. The woman was going to dial the number on her telephone when, suddenly, she saw her son running around the room with a baseball bat in his hands. The woman told him to stow that baseball bat in the cupboard, but suddenly the child started to hiccup. So his mother went to the kitchen and brought him a glass of water. Then, finnaly, she took the phone and dialed the number of the tailor. She asked him if he had fixed the seams of the jacket. He said he was bringing the jacket to her home, but, on the way, he crashed on another car and now his car has been towing to the mechanic for being fixed. In that moment the woman almost passed out, because the jacket was a present for her mother. So she took her backward cellphone and called her husband for telling him about what happened and to ask him if he could buy another present. But he said he couldn't do that, because he was to the hardware store for buying the tether to tie the dog on the three.

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A nonsense story

This is a complete nonsense story, but I only want to practice some new words.

The woman was going to dial the number on her telephone when, suddenly, she saw her son running around the room with a baseball bat in his hands. The woman told him to stow *1 that baseball bat in the cupboard, but suddenly the child started to hiccup. So his mother went to the kitchen and brought him a glass of water. Then, finally, she took the phone and dialed the number of the tailor. She asked him if he had fixed the seams of the jacket. He said he was bringing the jacket to her home, but, on the way, he crashed into*2 another car and now his car has been towed to the mechanic to get fixed. At that moment the woman almost passed out, because the jacket was a present for her mother *3. So she took back her cellphone and called her husband to tell him about what had happened and to ask him if he could buy another present. But he said he couldn't do that, because he was going to the hardware store to buy*4 the tether to tie the dog on the tree.

*1 in this sentence stow makes sense but it would be much better to use 'put'

*2 prepositions 'on' and 'into' - http://www.eslcafe.com/grammar/prepositions08.html see this site for more help

*3 This sentence doesn't really make sense to me. Passed out means to faint, why is she fainting because of a present for her mother?

*4 prepositions 'to' and 'for' - check this site for help http://www.talkenglish.com/grammar/prepositions-of-to-for.aspx

A Made Up Story

This is a made up story, but I wrote it, to practice some new words.

The woman was going to call the tailor on the phone when, suddenly, she saw her son running around the room with a baseball bat in his hand. The woman told him to put the baseball bat away, but suddenly the child stated to hiccup. So, his mother went to the kitchen and brought him a glass of water. Then, finally, she called the tailor. She asked him if he had fixed the seams of the jacket she wanted him to fix. He said he was bringing the jacket to her home, but, on the way, he crashed into another car, and now his car was being towed to the garage to be fixed. At that moment, the woman almost passed out, because the jacket was a present for her mother. So, she took her cellphone, and called her husband and explained the situation to him, and asked him if he could buy another present. He said he couldn't, because he was on his way to the hardware store, to buy a rope to tie the dog to the tree.

Lorenzo, I really liked reading this story you made up! Overall, I think you did a pretty good job, I did notice a few grammar mistakes, and a few spelling errors, but overall I think you did well. I did notice a few word choice mistakes, and also felt that though good the story had a lot of excess words that were not really needed and could have been shortened to something similar that I rewrote. The word "stow" that you used in your writing is not really used in everyday commonplace English. "Stow" is used on airplanes and boats or ships to mean "put something away", so though the usage was correct, in this case "stow" was not used in the correct context, and could be rewritten as I have done. If you have any questions, please let me know!

A nonsense story

This is a complete nonsense story, but I would only practice some new words.
The woman was going to dial the number on her telephone when, suddenly, she saw her son running around the room with a baseball bat in his hands. The woman told him to stow that baseball bat in the cupboard, but suddenly, the child started to hiccup. So his mother went to the kitchen and brought him a glass of water. Then, finally, she took the phone and dialed the number of the tailor. She asked him if he had fixed the seams of the jacket. He said he was bringing the jacket to her home, but, on the way, he crashed into another car and now his car has been towed to the mechanic to be fixed. In that moment the woman almost passed out, because the jacket was a present for her mother. So she took her backward cellphone and called her husband, telling him about what happened and asked him if he could buy another present. He said he couldn't do that, because he was to the hardware store buying a tether to tie the dog on the tree.

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