it's my first time to use it
hi!everyone,it's my first time to use it,let me introduce myself first..
i am not a beauty,i am a mommy.
two years ago work was my whole life,i couldnt gave up my work because i thought if i gave up my company will(is it wrong grammer?)be game over.oneday i have my baby,i dimissioned naturally.i began to travel with my son until last year.we went to guangzhou,shunde(there are sooooooo many delicious food!!!!),zhuhai(there is a sea animal zoo,but i think it's not good for keep them in a little space,i wont be there any more),beihai(in guangxi,there is a beautiful soft beach),and shanghai.
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It's my first time to use it using italki
Hi everyone! It's my first time to use it using italki so let me introduce myself.I am not a beauty; I am a mommy.
Two years ago work was my whole entire life. I couldn't gave give up my work because I thought if I did, gave up my company will would (is it wrong grammar?) be game over fire me. One day I have had my baby and I was dimissioned dismissed naturally. I began to travel traveled with my son until last year. We went to Guangzhou, Shunde (there are sooooooo many delicious foods!!!!), Zhuhai (there is a sea animal zoo,but I think it's not good to keep them in little spaces so I won't be go there any more), Beihai (in Guangxi, there is a beautiful soft beach),and Shanghai.
Hi luna fu,
Not bad for your first effort. Though I made a number of changes, it was still pretty understandable. The one change I'm not sure of is where I changed "will be game over" to "would fire me". I wasn't sure what you were trying to say by saying it would be game over with your company so I took a guess. I also didn't know what you meant by "I dimissioned naturally" so I took a guess on that one as well. If I mistook your meaning on those please let me know and I'll correct them. :)
One thing to remember is that, in English, we always capitalize the first person pronoun "I", regardless of where it is in the sentence. The first letter of each sentence and city names should be capitalized as well.
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it's my first time to use it
hi!everyone,it's my first time to use it,let me introduce myself first..i am not a beauty,i am a mommy.
two years ago work was my whole life,i couldn't give up my work because i thought if i gave up my work it will(is it wrong grammer?)be game over. One day I had a baby and I left my work naturally.i began to travel with my son until last year.we went to guangzhou,shunde(there are sooooooo much delicious food!!!!),zhuhai(there is a sea animal zoo,but i think it's not good to keep them in a little space,i wont be going there any more),beihai(in guangxi,there is a beautiful soft beach),and shanghai.
Very good Luna Fu - I understood completely. I have made some small changes but that was easy to understand. I am not too sure why you put ' I am not a beauty' because most people do not care about that - you are a mother and that in itself is a beautiful thing.
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