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Hi everyone !
I would like you to correct the following report I've written, Thank you in advance.
The aim of this report is to outline the issues raised in relation to the college café and make recommendations on how to these problems could be adressed.
Closing times:
It opens early, which is appropriate for the students. However, a lot of them can't go because of the closing times. It closes soon, therefore, many students cannot purchase a meal or drinks.
Better menu:
Some students go there every day to have a breakfast or have a snack. Although the quality is good, they feel that they are not provided with a wide range of options, especially for vegetarians.
Furniture:
There are many tables and chairs to sit down and talk with your friends. Nevertheless, they are very uncomfortable, basic and old. For this reason, new furniture would make the café a better and beautiful place for students to attend.
Pricing policy
There is not a wide variety of menus and those existing are very expensieve. Hence, if prices could be reduced, that would atract more people.
Recommendations
From all the above points, it is clear that several improvements could be made , from replacing the furniture to widening the choice of meals. If the opening hours could be extended and the prices reduced slightly, the new café would undoubtedly be more popular with students.
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Report
Hi everyone !I would like you to correct the following report I've written, Thank you in advance.
The aim of this report is to outline the issues raised in relation to the college café and make recommendations on how to these problems could be adressed.
Closing times:
It opens in the morning, which is great for students. However, a lot of them can't go because of the closing time. It closes much too early in the afternoon, therefore, many students cannot purchase a meal or drink.
Better menu:
Some students go there every day to have breakfast or a snack. The quality is good, however, they feel they are not provided with a wide range of options, especially for vegetarians.
Furniture:
There are many tables and chairs to sit down and talk with your friends, however, they are very uncomfortable, basic, and old. For this reason, new furniture would make the café a better and beautiful place for students to attend.
Pricing policy
There is not a wide variety of menus and those existing are very expensive. Hence, if prices could be reduced, that would attract more people.
Recommendations
From all the above points, it is clear that several improvements could be made , from replacing the furniture to widening the choice of meals. If the opening hours could be extended and the prices reduced slightly, the new café would undoubtedly be more popular with students.
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Report
Hi everyone !I would like you to correct the following report I've written, Thank you in advance.
The aim of this report is to outline the issues raised in relation to the college café and make recommendations on how to these problems could be addressed.
Closing times:
It opens early, which is appropriate for the students. However, a lot many of them can't go because of the rather early closing times. It closes too soon, therefore, many students cannot purchase a meal or drinks.
Better menu:
Some students go there every day to have a breakfast or have a snack. Although the food is of good quality is good, they feel that they are not provided with a wide range of options, especially for the vegetarians.
Furniture:
There are many tables and chairs to sit down and talk with your friends. Nevertheless Unfortunately, they are very uncomfortable, basic and old. For this reason, new furniture would make the café a better and more beautiful place for students to attend spend time. (Attend sounds weird in this sentence because it implies that there is a scheduled event at the cafe at all time. "Attend" is more used for scheduled events such as class, functions, parties, luncheons, fundraisers, etc.)
Pricing policy
There is not a wide variety of menus The menu is not extensive, and those existing the current items are very expensieve expensive. Hence, if prices could be reduced, that would atract attract more people.
Recommendations
From all the above aforementioned points, it is clear that several improvements could be made, from replacing the furniture to widening the choice of meals meal choices. (This is a personal preference. "Widening the choice of meals" is correct, but it sounds more natural as "Widening the meal choices".) If the opening hours hours of operation could be extended and the prices reduced slightly, the new (I would not say "new cafe" unless there are some physical renovations, such as architectural upgrades) café would undoubtedly be more popular with students.
Remember, Antonio, as with most other languages, there are plenty of ways to express the same meaning, so if you see different corrections on the same errors, don't worry too much.
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Report
Hi everyone !I would like you to correct the following report I've written, Thank you in advance.
The aim of this report is to outline the issues raised in relation to the college café and make recommendations on how to these problems could be adressed. addressed
Closing times:
It opens early, which is appropriate for the students. However, a lot of them can't go because of the closing times. It closes soon early, ("soon" implies that it is a one time thing, while "early" dictates that the closing time is the same from day to day. e.g. "I get off work early." "I get off work soon" )therefore, many students cannot purchase a meal or drinks.
Better menu:
Some students go there every day to have a breakfast or have a snack. (We don't use the indefinite article "a" when talking about a meal. Snack isnt a meal so you can use "a" there.) Although the quality is good, they feel that they are not provided with a wide range of options, especially for vegetarians.
Furniture:
There are many tables and chairs to sit down at and talk with your friends. (This sentence is a compund sentence and requires 2 prepositionals phrases. "with your friends" is one, but the other side doesnt have one. So adding the preposition "at" makes it a prepositional phrase.) Nevertheless However, (Nevertheless is used in place of "instead" and usually has the word "but" before it. "But nevertheless". However is a better word to use here.) they are very uncomfortable, basic and old. For this reason, new furniture would make the café a better and beautiful place for students to attend.
Pricing policy
There is not a wide variety of menus and those existing are very expensieve expensive. Hence, if prices could be reduced, that would atract attract more people.
Recommendations
From all the above points, it is clear that several improvements could be made, from replacing the furniture to widening the choice of meals. If the opening hours could be extended and the prices reduced slightly, the new café would undoubtedly be more popular with students.
As a note, make sure all punctuation doesn't have a space before it.
I love salad ! = incorrect
I love salad! = correct
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