talk about my 2016 In February, I went to Hong Kong Disney, I found my childhood there, and the firework is very beautiful. In Spring Festival, my memory is food food food. when my relatives came to v

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talk about my 2016 In February, I went to Hong Kong Disney, I found my childhood there, and the firework is very beautiful. In Spring Festival, my memory is food food food. when my relatives came to visit my family, I need to accompany their children,okay, that moment I was the oldest child. then I changed my job, to be a activity planner, plan a activity, to make the participants happy, I am also happy. But the rest days are just 3 days, so I resigned again. In August, I went to travel alone, Xi An and Xi Ning. I hope to go to Xi An for many years, I love this historical city, the ancient city wall, I cycled a round on the city wall, the wind is soft and let me think the ancient life and the ancient people. Liang Pi is the famous food in Xi An, it is very delicious.Terra Cotta Warriors is spectacular.But I don't know why Xi An just have a few traffic post. I love Xi Ning's blue sky, blue Qing Hai Lake, Cha Ka Lake. I could see my clear reflection on Cha Ka Lake, it seems to be attached with the sky, so beautiful.Qing Hai Lake is big,grassland is big, I feel I don't have any trouble upset when I saw Qing Hai Lake and the grassland.Oh I ride horse and shot an arrow on the grassland , my first try,but, good experience. After I went back my home, I started to look for a new job, I think it is hard to find a job,which I want to do.But now I like this new job , and work hard, want to earn much many money to travel again, and also want to learn paint. November in Guangzhou, cool wind, blue sky, and sunshine, it is very comfortable weather.2017 is coming.I hope i do this job at least 1 year, and hope to go to Sichuan in 2017. that's all. thank your for reading my words. Sue 2016.11.5

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talk about my 2016

In February, I went to Hong Kong Disney. I relived my childhood there, and the fireworks were very beautiful.
In the Spring, I went to a Festival and all I can remember is food food food. When my relatives came to visit my family, I needed to watch their children. It was in that moment that I was the oldest child.
Then I changed my job, to be an activity planner. When I plan an activity, to make the participants happy, I also become happy. But I only had 3 days off, so I resigned again.
In August, I went to travel alone, to Xi An and Xi Ning. I've been hoping to go to Xi An for many years. I love this historical city - the ancient city wall, the wind is soft and let's me think the ancient life and the ancient people. Liang Pi is the famous food in Xi An, and it is very delicious. The Terra Cotta Warriors were spectacular.But I don't know why Xi An just have a few traffic post. <-- I don't know what you're tying to say here.
I love Xi Ning's blue sky, the blue Qing Hai Lake, Cha Ka Lake. I could see my clear reflection on Cha Ka Lake, it seems to be attached with the sky. Qing Hai Lake is big, and so is the grassland. I Instantly forgot all my troubles when I saw Qing Hai Lake and the grassland. I also got to ride a horse and shoot an arrow on the grassland. Even though it was my first try, it was a good experience.

After I went back home, I started to look for a new job, I think it is hard to find a job, that I want to do. But now I like this new job. I want to work hard, earn a lot of money to travel again, and also want to learn paint.

November in Guangzhou - cool wind, blue sky, and sunshine, it is very comfortable weather. 2017 is coming. I hope i can have this job for at least 1 year, and hope to go to Sichuan in 2017.

that's all. thank your for reading my words.

Sue
2016.11.5

Your English is so close to being perfect! For the most part, your ideas are perfectly articulated and communicated. (In other words, I can understand what you're saying). Your biggest issue is wording and sentence order. As well as vocabulary choices. I tried to correct the grammar as much as I could! Hope this helps! Keep at it! :)

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