Could you check my letter of request and correct mistakes?
October 29.2012
Emma Mckagan
123- Circle Drive
Releigh, NC 27601
Ms. Lauren Cross
87 Pine Needle Drive
Chapel Hill, NC 27514
Dear Ms. Cross,
My name is Emma Mckagan and I am an international student in New Zeland. I am writing to you in connection with the start date of job in your local company which I have been offered.
Unfortunately, I am the bearer of bad news. I am not available to start my job on the 4th of March due to the fact that I will take an examination to finish my course
(please state which course and highlight its importance). I am enormously determined to pass this important exam and as a result I need additional time in order to prepare. I would be significantly grateful if you could permit me to start my job one week later.
I am really interested in this working site and I would like to be dedicated to this job as soon as I will be available. If it would not be any inconvenience I could gratuitously spend a few day to cover the missing time
(it seems rather extreme to promise a week of free labor but it's grammatically correct). In addition, I am planning to volunteer this summer and I could promote your company on a higher scale among young people.
I hope you understand my awkward situation and accept my suggested solution. Thank you in advance for your considering my request.
(your most common mistake seems to be forgetting to use the word "the")Yours sincerely,
Emma Mckagan