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self-introduction Hi I'm an applicant who loves Ratatouille and baguettes. I think that I have 3 capabilities[|keɪpə|bɪləti] that Le cordon bleu requires. First, it's a communication abilitiy. As a step in an English institution, I could improve the communication skill by undertaking counsel affairs for students Second, it's career. I specialized in European in a university. I specially had interests in french culture, so I attended classes relating to france. Also I've falled in love with french cuisine since I finished a short language traning course in france. I oftenly looked for french restaurant and make some simple french cuisine for my family. Third, it's a character. I'm meticulous and quick to handle things. For example I worked as a research assistant in institute of international maritime affairs. I undertook a task to manage a homepage and to assist in international conferences . I get basis capabilities through various experiences. Now I want to develop food culture of Korea by promoting attitude that french cook have. ( I mean in Korea there are a bunch of restaurants, but I'm not sure how many cooks make dishes having prides. It is essential attitude to have prides in their foods in order to develop korean food as global cuisines. )

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self-introduction

Hi I'm an applicant who loves Ratatouille and baguettes.
I think that I have 3 capabilities[|keɪpə|bɪləti] that Le cordon bleu requires.

First, it's a I have the ability to communicateion abilitiy. As a step (?) in an English institution, I could improve the thiscommunication skill by undertaking counsel affairs for students  (do you mean counseling or advising students?)

Second, it's career (word choice? Career is not an ability or skill. Maybe you mean ambition?). I specialized in European (word choice--European is an adjective, it needs a noun) in a university. I especially had interests in french culture, so I attended classes relating to france.
Also I've fallend I fell in love with french cuisine since after I finished a short language training course in france.
I oftenly looked for french restaurants and make some simple french cuisine meals for my family.

Third, it's a character (again, not a skill or ability). I'm meticulous and quick to handle things.
For example I worked as a research assistant in the institute of international maritime affairs.
I undertook a task to manage a homepage and to assist in international conferences .

I get have acquired basic capabilities (maybe you mean "skills"?) through various experiences. Now I want to develop the food culture of Korea by promoting the attitude that french cooks have. ( I mean in Korea there are a bunch of restaurants, but I'm not sure how many cooks make dishes having prides with pride.) 
It is essential for Korean cooks attitude to have prides in their foods in order to develop korean food as a global cuisines. )
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self-introduction

Hi I'm an applicant who loves Ratatouille and baguettes.
I think that I have 3 capabilities[|keɪpə|bɪləti] that Le cordon bleu requires. (If this is the school, you will want to capitalize all three words in the name, Le Cordon Bleu).

First, it's a is my ability to communicate. communication abilitiy. As a step (student) in an English institution, I could improve the student communication skills by undertaking counsel affairs for coaching/mentoring/tutoring students.

Second, it's career is my experience. I specialized in European in a university. I specI ally had with a special interests in French culture, so I attended classes relating related to france.


Also I've falled I fell in love with French cuisine since after I finished a short language traning course in France.


I oftenly looked for French restaurants and make some simple French cuisine for my family.

Third, it's a is character. I'm meticulous and quick to handle things.


For example, I worked as a research assistant in at the Institute of International Maritime Affairs, where I undertook managing the homepage and assisting with international conferences.
I undertook a task to manage a homepage and to assist in international conferences .

I get basis capabilities through various experiences. I haved gained my abilities through varied experiences, and now I want to develop the food culture of Korea by promoting the attitude that French cooks have. ( I mean In Korea there are a bunch of many restaurants, but I'm not sure how many cooks make dishes having with prides. 

It is an essential attitude to have prides in their foods in order to develop korean food as global cuisines. )

Great job! I hope the corrections help.


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self-introduction

Hi I'm an applicant who loves Ratatouille and baguettes.
I think that *I have 3 capabilities[|keɪpə|bɪləti] that Le cordon bleu requires.

*Although it may be considered arrogant in Korean, be confident when communicating in professional English. 

First, [it's a communication abilitiy.--> Try "I have good communication skills."*]  As a step in an English institution, I could improve the communication skill by undertaking counsel affairs for students

* Abilities are things that you own in English.

Second, [it's career--> ?*] I specialized in European in a university. I specially had interests in french culture, so I attended classes relating to france.
Also I've [falled --> fallen] in love with french cuisine since I finished a short language traning course in france.
I [oftenly -->often] looked for french restaurant and make some simple french cuisine for my family.

*A career is not a capability. Try something more specific like "passion for cooking" or a specific task (basting or baking or something like that.

Third, [it's a character--> Try "I have the perfect characteristics to be a chef."*]. I'm meticulous and quick to handle things.
For example I worked as a research assistant in institute of international maritime affairs.
I undertook a task to manage a homepage and to assist in international conferences .

*Characteristics are also things you own in English

[I get basis capabilities through various experiences.-->Try "These basic experiences motivate me."] Now I want to develop food culture [of-->in] Korea by promoting attitude that french cook[s] have. ( I mean in Korea there are a bunch of restaurants, but I'm not sure how many cooks make dishes having pride[s].
It is [an] essential attitude to have pride[s] in their foods in order to develop kKorean food as global cuisines. )


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self-introduction

Hi I'm an applicant who loves ratatouille and baguettes.
I think that I have 3 skills that a cordon bleu requires.

First, communication. As a step in an English institution, I could improve the communication skill by undertaking counsel affairs for students

Second, is career. I specialized in European studies at university. I was especially interested in French culture, so I attended classes relating to France.
Also I fell in love with french cuisine since I finished a short language training course in France.
I have often looked for a french restaurant and make some simple french cuisine for my family.

Third, is a character. I'm meticulous and quick to handle things.
For example I worked as a research assistant in an institute of international maritime affairs.
I managed a homepage and assisted in international conferences .

I get basic capabilities through various experiences. Now I want to develop Korean cuisine by promoting a french cook's attitude. ( I mean in Korea there many restaurants, but perhaps few have the pride in their food as the French).
It is essential that Koreans take pride in their food for it to become a global cuisine.

Very well written!

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