回家以后/After Getting Home

回家之以后，我要吃一些東西个小吃，因为放了学我常常会饿。当我先看完一会儿电视，然后也会跟我的爸爸一起 understood下棋。我有的时候遛狗，如果我的妈妈太忙的话, 我会遛狗。最后我才做功课/作业，我喜欢上学校，You can't say, "I like school" this way in Chinese.  It means you like the physical entity (the building). What I corrected corresponds to "I love going to school"  不过讨厭但是不喜欢作业。


谢谢!

1.   There is a difference between 之后 and 以后.  The former denotes a short period of time, a few moments etc. while the later denotes a long period of time or permanence. 回家之后, 我会帮媽媽做飯, After returning home, I will help mother cook. 回家以后我會帮妈妈做飯 means "from now on, after going home, I will help mother cook".

2.  Chinese Familial terms are strictly defined defined in terms of oneself.  So you don't need to use "my" as in English.  It is understood.  If it is not yours, then you preceed with the appropriate pronoun.

3.  It is best you provide an English so that I can help you with the better nuance.  I hate to say, most of the corrections are just grammar corrections and take no account of what you are really want to say.  So this won't really help in your pursuit of learning Chinese.  Of course, I may guess wrong, hence your English version.

回家以后/After getting home

回家以后，我吃一个小吃，因为放学我常常饿。我先看一会儿电视，然后跟我的爸爸一起下棋。我有的时候遛狗，如果我的妈妈太忙。最后我做作业，我喜欢学校，但是不喜欢作业。


回家之后， 因为放学后肚子会饿，我吃了一个小吃。 我看了电视后，跟爸爸下棋。如果妈妈太忙，我有时候会遛狗。 我最后才做作业。 虽然喜欢学校学习，我不喜欢作业。

Your sentence structures are too "english-like". I corrected the structures and expressions to make it sound more native.

回家以后/After getting home

回家以后，因为放学时我总是很饿，于是我吃了一个小吃零食。因为放学我常常饿。接着，我先看一会儿电视，然后跟我的爸爸一起下棋。当我妈妈没空的时候，我会去遛狗我有的时候遛狗，如果我的妈妈太忙。最后我会做作业，。虽然我喜欢学校，但是我并不喜欢作业。