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Culture shock

I tried to write a paper about culture shock. but there might be a lot of mistakes. I would like to correct sentences that I wrote. could you help me?


Does experiencing a new culture make you feel uncomfortable?


Have you ever felt anxiety or uneasiness when you expose yourself to a new world? Those feelings might occurre in the process of adaptation in[/during] intercultural transitions because it is a whole new world for you. You need to adjust a new environment apart from your original culture. The shock you experience in the process of adjusting to a new world is called culture shock. It could occur even within your home country.

Ohayo Kana-san :)

There is nothing really wrong with your essay except a few minor spelling mistakes. It's an interesting topic though.

I dont really remember experiencing culture shock when travelling to other places, but I have experienced it when arriving back home ! Coming back from Japan to Australia, everything was so much less crowded that it felt very wierd and left me somewhat alienated for a  period of time.

Culture shock